maybe

wrote it when i thought i liked a guy..i was totally wrong..lol

When you smile that smile i stop and stare.
when you laugh that laugh i wish you're here
then i close my eyes and whisper "maybe"
Just maybe you think of me

Reviews

[Emily B]

oh, just maybe . . . lovely

[SimplyDisastrous]

I wrote a poem called "Maybe" too. It's similar to this. Maybe you could check it out sometime. Anyways, this is a really good poem. I can definitely relate to this. (:

[Andrew Wright]

I feel a sense of longing in this poem that I definitely can relate to. This is a nice read. Definitely keep writing.

[Randolf Ramos]

When you smile that smile i stop and stare.
when you laugh that laugh i wish you're here
then i close my eyes and whisper "maybe"
Just maybe you think of me

--- When you smile that smile, i stop and stare.

--- when you laugh that laugh i wish you're here === complicated?
sentence is too obscure.

------- then i close my eyes and whisper "maybe" --- great line here

--------- double use of word in a poem, maybe u could replace maybe with another word ( what ive learned is that you could add some spice in a poem by not choosing words that are the same )

_________ This is great poem indeed ==== great, keep on making a poem.

[Cassiopia Summers]

Short, simple and sweet. (:

[Sonali]

That happens with all of us I guess,u captured it nicely.Just maybe you think of me - thats what everyone thinks when they look at someone they like.

[Robin]

very lyrical , a beautiful fun flow to this one

[Gracie-San]

This was sweet and simple. Good job.

[Revolved]

This is so sweet! I love the rhyme it's just so cute.

[RTB]

beautiful i kno exactly wut u mean great poem!