how to write a song

thougts pop out my mind suddenly..before i know it..its a poem..this is..i dont know..just felt like rhyming..lol

i was on the passenger seat
with my eyes on my feet
and im thinking of you,only you
that's why i wrote a song for us two

your smile makes me smile
and i forget my senses for awhile
then the words came easy
the melody spoke right through me

the chorus took me a lot of time
but with you i found my rhyme
the chords pulled it through
for you,there's nothing i won't do

as i strum my guitar for the coda
you started the ignition and offered me a soda
i look at you and the song is complete
i swear i never missed a beat

Reviews

[Dream Weaver]

Great write Heich, But I would change up the second line
in the last stanza, it doesn't seem to fit. let me give you an
example if you don't mind. (as I strum my guitar to this
romantic coda, My feeling towards you hasn't changed one
iota) hope that helps..."Soda just doesn't sound right"

[Joshua Donahue]

it's the perfect mix of music and poetry and love!!! love it!!!

[Emily B]

this is wonderful, thanks for inviting me to it

[Revolved]

Aw this is sweet! I love the rhymes and the melody. It was so great! I love it. I don't do well with rhymes so that's what makes it seem better for me. The song is so cute! Thank-you for sharing this!

[Iota]

I this is an adorable write Heich. I do like the rhyme I know it is difficult to do and keep the meaning of your poem. I think you did a good job on that. Love is like writing a song, a long melody of happiness hopefully. Great write.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a sweet and rhythmic emotive poetic~well drawn

[Amber-The-Panda]

I agree with silent scream. Your poem has a rythem to it and then you say soda and it sort of throws you off. Besides that, it is a good poem. I love the rhymes you choose. Thumbs up! Smiley :D

[SimplyDisastrous]

This is brilliant. The rhyming scheme is awesome. I love it! :D