Walking With My Eyes Closed

It's like I've been walking with my eyes closed
No direction, always lost
Reaching out in all directions
Back-and-forth, up-and-down, everything criss-crossed
Imagining my surroundings
Oblivious to what's around me
Paying no mind to my trespasses
No respect for any boundary
In my mind I was running free
In open space and unbridled
Really I was running wild, in your face and entitled
My eyes are slowly opening
And all I see is dust and dirt
And my footprints on the ground
Leading to all the ones I've hurt
Blindly I've come this far
Thanks to the universe and her good grace
And the lesson to be learned
Placed upon my face

Reviews

[johnnyqueer]

This seems to be about self discovery and the gratitude that follows, I like it very much!

[MoriartyMesa]

Keely Jane your work is always meaningful and always makes one think.

[emmajoy]

Words laid neat as pie yet without a bright silver frame: ' In my mind I was running free - In open space and unbridled - Really I was running wild, in your face and entitled - My eyes are slowly opening .. '
Brave words and honest as peeled onions. Better to live and discover what makes self a winner or loser.. or - one of those people who discover they're as human as most others! Or in some ways, more human.., such a smile making thought, especially right now.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime it seem. We are walking in circles.
"Thanks to the universe and her good grace
And the lesson to be learned
Placed upon my face"
I liked the above lines a lot and thank you dear Keely Jane for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Honesty is oozing from this emotional write. Your good grace will overcome mistakes and the past. Penning is a healing element dear poet. Thank you for purging.

[barleygirl]

I love this message & it's a rare message I've never seen written about, but it's common in real life. People always start out arrogant as hell & wisdom comes slowly & painfully over the course of life. I stomped on all kinds of good people just becuz I could. I've never heard anybody say that, but we all do/did it. I love that this poem does not sound like the narrator is flogging him/herself over this, but just being realistic & telling it like it is. There's no need to feel like a dumbass, we all start life as dumbasses. Living is all about learning & growing. I love this message & how you put it into the context of real life, a person owning one's mistakes without wallowing in regret. I love the rhyme & rhythm, too! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kari Rakitan]

This is an interesting poem. I think it's important to untangle personal freedom from breaking boundaries and trespassing on others. My rights end where your rights begin. I think that's a particularly important thing to keep in mind as we go out in public during pandemic times. A little respect can mean the difference between life and death.