Got Glitter

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*                Shine                *

 Reflect

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My scrapes reveal my sparkle

I have glitter in my veins

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Bleeding out and listening

*               To the beating of my star               *

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*               Still glistening             *

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Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

How the HELL did you manage to format this? It's so awesome and intriguing. A little bit on the small side with the font side but I think it reinforces that message you're trying to send (maybe just a tiny bit bigger?). Anyways, loved how you formatted it and loved the short but very personal poem!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Yep...that's glitter :) I liked this one, because it felt very "sensory" in terms of form and wording. I got to musing about the way that as humans we gravitate (and create) things that look like the stars, but that we can hold in our hands. An interesting idea... Nicely done.

[WindingRoad]

Beautiful. I like the shape and stars that give the words an extra meaning, very creative.

[bobc]

K...well done. A good example, I think, of concrete poetry. ...bobc

[Renée]

oh this one is lovely Keely ! the shape, the message, the twinkling effect glistening though it all... I do think this is my favorite you have done !

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a beautiful visual poem, KeelyJane.. I love the sparkles and your imagery. Well done dear.

[Dana Alsamsam]

i'm pretty sure glitter runs in my veins as well! fun and girly concrete piece :)

[Simon Welsh]

Love the imagery. Nice one.

[Mike Emil]

gary glitter is rolling in his grave
is he dead?
dunno
HAI!!!

[B-poet]

A very interesting & unique format you've displayed here. Great work. An intriguing write & read. :)

[gombeggar]

this is amusing...needs to go to music I think...and needs to be worked and made longer :)