Save The Last Word For Me

Save The Last Word For Me

A Poem by KeelyJane

Like a two steppin' tongue tango
Our 'I love you's' danced
Words can find rhythm
When hearts are less advanced

© 2013 KeelyJane


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I love how short and simple this appears, and yet behind every line is a deeper meaning. The dance metaphor is beautifully crafted throughout the poem. I love the play on "Save the last dance for me" as you use it -- "Save the last word for me" well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Very cool KJ. I like this. Beauifully penned, the desire is evident.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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there's so much sacredness in "i love you" i would not want to say it immediately to someone as it might become just a habit and would lose its meaning. this is just a thought that came to mind after reading this short and interesting piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I love this, it reminds of a haiku - lots of meaning in few words.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love how short and simple this appears, and yet behind every line is a deeper meaning. The dance metaphor is beautifully crafted throughout the poem. I love the play on "Save the last dance for me" as you use it -- "Save the last word for me" well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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i love this short style with each word chosen so deliberately! i adore the first line with that extended alliteration that just rolls off the tongue...just like a tango! love this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Nice short flowing piece with so many interpretations. On the one hand it could be early stages of a relationship when people say what they feel obliged to but the chemistry has not kicked in. Alternatively I see a hollow relationship where things are simply said but not sincere?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Interesting idea...the last line especially. I see this metaphorically, and on one hand I can see tragedy and on the other I see beauty and love. Interesting contrast and juxtaposition. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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interesting piece Keely.. I like it.. xo Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Ah! Great little rhyme Keely

Posted 11 Years Ago


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A wonderful write. Four short lines of profound loving wisdom. Great work KeelyJane. A heartfelt write & read. :)

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KeelyJane
KeelyJane

Albuquerque, NM



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I'm just a girl with a lifetime of experiences. I've taken from those experiences what can be put into words and poetically put them together to share with all of you. These are my contributions. .. more..

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