Two Thousand Pounds

You laid your point of view upon me
      it weighed two thousand pounds
A ton of reality dawned on me
      brought my knees beyond the ground
The volume of your perspective
      reached the blind depths of my core
Condensing my every emotion
      into the tears now on the floor
With tarnished claws you scraped my eyes
      opened them to truths
Bleeding them for the sacrifice
      made for me to see in sooth
Two thousand pounds of guilt
      a ton of shame prepared and served
With bittersweet sauce of recognition
      A dish that is deserved
      
    

Author's Note

Dedicated to someone special, you know who you are....

Reviews

[Astro]

I love this one KJ there's a great lesson to be learned sometimes when we are made to see the truth no matter how painful it may be for someone to get us to see it. Then the shame and guilt set in, like being a child who does not want to eat but is made to sit in front of a plate of food with no desire to take a bite, but knowing that if they do they will be able to move past the obstacle to our true desires. Great job.

[Jo]

Wow, this is deep and dark indeed. I'm feeling crushed as I read it and I love the idea of emotions being condensed into tears.

[Angi]

Heavy hitting piece, KJ. The dish may be served over and over, you don't have to eat it! Angi~

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No write from you for ages then this heavy weight piece. Very poignant, flowing with such impact. The protagonist recognising what they have done and regretting it.

[B-poet]

Loved the chosen theme you've illustrated here. A very well written piece of epic proportions. Great work. A compelling write & read. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

You laid your point of view upon me
it weighed two thousand pounds...

Your first lines say it all... sometime just one word from another can weigh us down. Just because a banquet of guilt is served, that does not mean that you must feast on it...

Great write!

[redflutterby]

Its hard to realize we may be wrong...but its also hard if someone else is wrong I'm placing guilt upon us. Great write... ;-)

[KurKota]

Not being aware of the causation of this writing, not going to presume to guess......the apparent guilt trip laid on you by whomever apparently was effective and hopefully for your sake not applied in error or for any self-serving purposes. Seems to me to be a cathargic excercise. Good write.