Waterfall

I've cried a river
A river for the lost
When my tears flooded the muddy banks
You skipped rocks across

I've waded in these waters
Waited in vain
When my river turned to rapids
You stood ashore still the same

I don't know how high this mountain
If its range reaches you at all
But there is a river running down its face
So much more than a waterfall

Reviews

[Aethereal]

This poem of your gets my imagination churning. It inspired me to write this tiny gift mono-rhyme for you to keep as your own:


Tears of the Lost

Rivers and seas tempest tossed
filled with sad tears of the lost
touching lands drenched in cold frost,
Toppling tall peaks never crossed.

[TL Boehm]

This is beautiful and mournful and deep with emotion. So much more than a waterfall. Yes.

[Mark]

Wow, I see religious overtones in this, questioning God... maybe that's just me? "I dont' know how high this mountain, If its range reaches you at all'.

The river, tears, waterfall... the two faces... very beautiful poem.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Someone who cares will climb that mountain to find the source of the waterfall.
Nicely done.

[Sami Khalil]

A very nice write...Thank you for sharing this splendid poem...:)

[Sheila Kline]

Tears may fall like a waterfall when they accompany a feeling of sadness so profound that it seems that nothing can stop it, like a waterfall that must spill - nothing can contain it but a dam built and sometimes that just allows it to back up and be even stronger. Some watch, some cause the pain, but the tears must fall. I like the end lines.

[Rita L. Sev]

It seems that the hurt is one-sided, like the other person doesn't know the pain they have caused...
Great imagery, emotion shown well.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Reminded me of the Jazz piece 'Cry me a River' sung best by Julie London. It is a sad, hurt and almost pleading piece where someone is making the effort but the other person is not. Nice flow and portrayal!

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Emotional and poignant. Nice work.