Waterfall

I've cried a river
A river for the lost
When my tears flooded the muddy banks
You skipped rocks across

I've waded in these waters
Waited in vain
When my river turned to rapids
You stood ashore still the same

I don't know how high this mountain
If its range reaches you at all
But there is a river running down its face
So much more than a waterfall

Reviews

[Aethereal]

This poem of your gets my imagination churning. It inspired me to write this tiny gift mono-rhyme for you to keep as your own:


Tears of the Lost

Rivers and seas tempest tossed
filled with sad tears of the lost
touching lands drenched in cold frost,
Toppling tall peaks never crossed.

[gombeggar]

very interesting imagery here...nice

[Simon Welsh]

Beautiful. All our tears that we shed can become a waterfall to others.

[B-poet]

A short poem that packs quite an emphatic punch. Loved the poetic flow and the overall theme for this riveting piece. Great work. :)

[Astro]

Great short piece with excellent flow and rhythm. The message is clear, in the comparisons of mountains and faces and tears and rivers to the reader. Most apropos, and poignant. Great write.

[h d e rushin]

As Mark mentioned in an earlier post, I too can see the religious overtones in this, whether intentional
or not. Who but a God (who but God) can put into a proper order or into a correct or suitable sequence or relationship? Not knowing how high the mountain is are the foibles of and weakness of the human
condition.

well written.
dana

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. We can cry so many tears for the lost. Find little peace with what we can see and touch. I like the closure of the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[kublakhan27]

Poignant imagery, and a very emotional piece...well done Keely :)

[MoriartyMesa]

Tears of emotion, faith and tears of humanity

[Robert Lindsay]

I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it, when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all.