Joint Forces

It’s   like   every   stress   and   strain

Meets   with   all   my   tears   and   pain

              And   they   plot   sabotage

An   ambush   of   circumstance   and   situation

Struggles   dissertation

              Joining   forces   to   drop   me

            Divinely   intervening   to   stop   me

Because    I’ve   been   on   this   road   for   too   long

I   am   the   lyrics   to   a   skipping   song

                      I   can’t

                     I   can’t

                    I  can’t

I  can’t   go   on

No   matter   how   strong

I   claim   to   be

I   am   wrong

              When  it  rains  it  pours  for  a  reason

              Telltale   signs   of   an   approaching   season

Spring   from  Fall

Because   I  fall

 I   fell

And   am  still  falling

The   desperate   in   me   is   calling

Punishing   me   for   stalling

Screaming, “Don’t    let   your   yesterdays

Be   your   tomorrows,   Dah’ling!”

Reviews

[Astro]

Nice 'accent' in the end. lol. I like the imagination and flow of this very much, with its conspiratorial stifling and skipping stagnancy. Some yesterdays can be invaluable others just weigh you down, so empty your emotional pockets and "Walk Tall".

[quinfinn]

the spaces between words in this write truly create the aura of being and feeling disconnected. the last two lines are platinum, well penned!

[KurKota]

What I read in this writing is the expression of feeling overwhelmed by stresses and events of life. Given that, I think you put it in a very effective format in that the structure enhances the plea. I think it demonstrates creativity in using the "whole" to enhance the message.

[Sami Khalil]

I like the form and the poem as a whole...Thank you for sharing...:)