Daffodil

If only
you would set your sights upon me
wrap your thoughts around my being
Take me into your focus,
see what I'm seeing

I see a blossom
a bud reaching to bloom
pollinated with potential
and standing its ground

Do you see roses?
Am I the flower that you'd pick?
The seeds that we planted
don't grow for granted
My stem no walking stick


If only
you would tend the gardens
If only
you would notice
that beneath all the weeds
there's you and there's me
what we had
and it's seeds

Do you see the petals?
Ready to spread like wings
fly open and absorb your sun
I will grow for you
A daffodil
I will become

If only
you would thaw
the frozen surface of heart
where deep roots are buried

Let our season restart

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

"My stem no walking stick"

the sad description of so many relationships that want to work, want to grow, but could never if one of the people will not water the plants so to speak. this metaphorical piece was laced with a tangible pain and hopelessness. awesome work!

(i will slowly get to many of your RR's- i look forward to reading more!)

[ShelleyA]

A poignant write about finding the way back to love. There is beauty in the meaning of flowers, seeds from which love grows. Beautiful use of metaphor and simile. Lovely imagery and descriptives. Heartfelt expression of hope as you pour out the desire of your heart. Powerful closing lines.

[jinxxnij]

This was fantastic! I loved that you use a daffodil to symbolize love as opposed to the more common reference of a rose. Yellow represents friendship and that's definitely a key component to a solid foundation for love. Beautifully penned poem my friend. Beautiful.

[Ency Bearis]

Beautiful metaphor, great piece.

[kublakhan27]

Masterfully crafted with it's very unique rhyme pattern...I often detect a sense of longing in your work, which is something the resonates with me...a wonderful piece of writing :)

[Angi]

Keely, this is a lovely reaching out. Imagery was there for me. Daffodils are so much prettier than roses, I think. Angi~

[MoriartyMesa]

I choose to see this as, "Is you is or is you aint my baby" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m7M4thNT_EY

[TL Boehm]

Wonderfully penned. Love the metaphor of daffodils for love.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

How could this person resist such a tender plea. Beautifully executed in metaphors of growing Keely

[Jack...]

Very beautful K.J. I love the referenece to the blooming of nature to the blooming of love. Very nice.

[Souladareatease]

Beautiful and worthy questions Your fine write Poses-delicate indeed!!!