The Mime

Everybody feels pain
No one dies without a scar
We all are colored melancholy
different shades of who we are

Each one of us has lay beneath a dark sky pillow
and seen the storm surround our flowers
We have all been picked and vased
dripping sorrow in midnight showers

Every one gets hurt
all of us black and blue painted
We all know sadness
been introduced and well acquainted

We all play the mime

I feel your pain 

as you feel mine

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

I am one who is haunted by Dickinson. So forgive me if so many poets here sound like her. Which has
little to do with her and everything to do with me.

The last stanza was, in fact, Dickinsonian as she also would use distinctiveness and apartness
to detail an action or event. This is very nicely written.
Who gives a s**t about spelling.
dana

[gombeggar]

needs an edit...sorry the editor in me never sleeps...but some great imaginations and visuals here

[Ency Bearis]

A well painted words, a true description and well written.

[MoriartyMesa]

This was like a painting, the art of your words.

[Lethu]

I love the personification about sadness in the last stanza, this was well put together :)

[s y e]

"No one dies without a scar"

What an amazing line! :-O This truly was amazing.

- Noodle.

[End.]

No one dies without a scar...one of the best lines I have ever read in all of poetry

[John F Carver]

Unfortunately I think you are quite right.

[Astro]

Even for the young, seeing it in the eyes of another, it is felt like tight emotions in its smothering introduction. Great write. This line, has a small grammatical error, "Each one of us has lie beneath a dark sky pillow' whereby, 'lie' should be "lay" or "has lain"(irregular, intransitive of 'to lie') due to its tense. Regardless, of my suggested edit, you have written a fine piece.

[kublakhan27]

This is a great piece Keely...wonderful images in each stanza...well done :)