Braille

Braille

A Poem by KeelyJane

If God is love and love is blind
our sins go unseen
Unless our actions are stamped in braille in the sky
like stars, you and I
     We're written
          and scattered
             and shiny
                 and bright
Encoded on God's black pages
what we call night

What he sees is what he reads
by the imprints we leave
     on each other
        when we steal
             when we cheat
                  when we deceive
Every wrong doing is felt
I believe
     by the hands of God
         in his fingertips
He reads our braille like the deaf read lips
Leave your mark
   etch yourself
        dot by dot
             line by line
You're braille is your beauty
   be good
      be kind
it's felt by the blind

God is a state of mind


        


         
              
            


© 2019 KeelyJane


Author's Note

KeelyJane
At breakfast this morning my 9 year old daughter explained the conclusion she's drawn from a dream she had last night about God....
I've put it into poem.

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Wow. That's deep - and for a nine year old to think along those lines? Profound. I find the thought of God - the hand of God registering humanity at the tactile level. So much more intimate, more personal than simple observation. We are made for touch, for physical contact so to take that to the level of tangible interaction - that our sins are picked up by God's 'skin' - fascinates me. It drew me into the poem. The gentle rhyme through out was also wonderful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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That's a very sweet thought, and I like the way it trickles down, speedily, through the poem. Nice writing.

Best wishes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


very nice sentiment, good and positive end...I think

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

it's always so interesting to take the pure and unkempt thoughts of the young and put them into words like these. my little sister is eight and some of the things she says are more profound than a renegade philosopher simply because her view on the world is not yet skewed. i thought the idea of this piece was absolutely beautiful! braille seems to appear and reappear as a theme in my writing so i found your use of it to be wonderful! great work

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have enjoyed my read, spot on analogies. I find the last line to be a bit understated though but, again, I am being subjective here. Sometimes being objective can elude me!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting and complex thought that we relish in, well done, good read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Smsrt girl. Watch out lol.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this poem, positive message and nice image. Sola fide.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An uplifting and encouraging write. Nice use of simile. Lovely depth of feeling. Thought provoking. I especially like:

"What he sees
is what he reads
by the imprints we leave
on each other"
Profound. Well penned. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is spectacular! Its format even resembles braille like patterns. I am such a fan!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful and uplifting:)enjoyed the form too...Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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KeelyJane
KeelyJane

Albuquerque, NM



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I'm just a girl with a lifetime of experiences. I've taken from those experiences what can be put into words and poetically put them together to share with all of you. These are my contributions. .. more..

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