Heart Attack

Loving you is gonna kill me
Suffocate my internal breath
Bring life to my emotions
Send my heart to its death

Taking the part of me I feel the most
In exchange for a promise made of sand
Where grains of pain will fall through
Leaving me  in the palm of your hand

The vein that carries my love
Exposes far within my chest
Where ruby tears of the cardiac 
Are in emotional arrest

Reviews

[A. H. Pinley]

Love is a miracle in life. We can't explain attraction aside from the obvious, but love is something entirely different. The love that a mother has for a child that would have her sacrifice everything for her child even if it kills her. The love shared between spouses for richer or poor, in sickness and health, for better or worse, love has this beautiful characteristic about it that I'm almost willing to bet leave scientist baffled. Good work!

[A. Amos]

Interesting piece of writting, i enjoyed

[Pryde Foltz]

That's some mad love. Loved that last stanza. It can feel like that sometimes.

[TL Boehm]

This is brilliant. its lyrical and flows beautifully. A wonderful write. I think my favorite is the last four lines but the whole poem is strong.

[gombeggar]

that is the cost quite often of relationships...nice words here

[Astro]

Really like the opening stanza for this one, the counterpoint of life/death being used to describe how love hurts. Nice.

[jinxxnij]

"Where ruby tears of the cardiac
Are in emotional arrest"

Brilliant!

[Simon Welsh]

Love it. Love is Hell... that first line resonates.

[Ency Bearis]

good vivid write