Goodbye Circus

I am done
Finished
Completely over with this ride
Up in the hills beyond my hearts valley
I roll down
down
down
The twists and the turns have done me in
Into what I am
Where I'm at
What I see
Who I never want to know again
Because it hurts, it was scary
It was a heavy load no one should have to carry
Like a trapeze swinging, only bringing
disappointment
and me
falling
to my knees
The weight of Love's Carnival
Juggling emotions and jumping through hoops
Trying to balance my sanity, dreaming of fruit loops
and candy
and swirls
and peanuts
I go nuts, doing donuts
Spinning in circles, in this cycle
This unicycle of just me
Going round and round
alone
The Clown

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

i really enjoy how your form allows the words to flow down and around, just as the poem says! if you look at it visually without reading the words it even looks a bit like a roller coaster form the side. the small circus like images in there gave this such a unique vibe that i really enjoyed. you capped it off perfectly with that last line!

[TL Boehm]

Fantastic. Love is like a circus. Even when its good its like a circus - but when its bad - its terrifying in the ups and downs - a wonderful write.

[jinxxnij]

I'm speechless. You are so good. By far one of my favorite writers on this site.

[Astro]

This poem is a marriage of styles. I can find several sewn together here really well. Some interesting descriptions using the circus theme. I really like the end though as it gives the poem a punch to illustrate the true feeling of the voice in the poem.

[Angi]

Playing the clown in a lovestory is never funny. I am dizzy as she spins and spins, those hoops are on fire, too. I want her to get up and walk away from that circus tent and never look back. Angi~

[gombeggar]

nice...think i'd like 2 hear this read aloud

[quinfinn]

we are all that clown, when we play the fool for love...that twisted and perverse carnival, with its treats and rides and pitfalls and prizes and the disappointment and betrayal of the midway.....step right up and get your heart taken by a scam....excellent write!

[s y e]

Love the metaphor and flow, well done!

~ Sye

[Simon Welsh]

I go nuts, doing donuts

I really liked that line ^_^ but the overall sadness made it more powerful.

[Ency Bearis]

A good portrayal and how a person went trough the circle of life, nice metaphor.