Enough

Constantly

I beg 

I plead

when I bleed

but you still feed

you succeed

in killing me

willingly

This cannot be

my destiny

           Let go of me

I need 

to be freed

You take

you leave

I give

you receive

I cannot believe

          I am allowing this

Your seed

your weed

breeds hate

inside of me

in spite of me

          No more

Reviews

[jinxxnij]

Nice! A different style of writing than usual. I love your diversity and your profound depth.

[Leigh]

Short punchy sentences? With a mixture of strong emotions and meanings, like this in the way it is done, but need to read more to get it, if you know what I mean

[Elle Thompson]

I would have liked to see the "constantly" repeated, and I think you should consider punctuation.

[A. H. Pinley]

May I say painful?

[kublakhan27]

Stunning...I love the flow and rhythm of this, and the rhymes are flawless...again, you've produced a very powerful statement on human nature, the dark side in particular...well done Keely :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Provocative and forceful. The tone feels bitter, but the poem itself seems like an unburdening, a relief. Good write.

[Frieda P]

Sometimes we need to be the one to let go in a relationship such as this...

Wasn't sure what 'your weed' was intended to mean but that one could go so many places. Nice one.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Gosh you are a busy bee. I awoke to another five pieces from you. Soon you will usurp the mighty Frieda who is our in house full-time poetess.
This is a flowing piece tinged with bitterness and anger.

[Frieda P]

Can't keep my name off your lips can you my love? ;-)

[redflutterby]

I like when a poem can be interpreted in more then one way. This could be an abusive relationship or about addiction. Either way it is sharp and powerful. Always enjoy the pictures you paint with your words...even the dark ones!!