Behind My Eyes

I close my eyes and look beyond the lid
Into the depths of my darkened vision
I see things never seen before
I see things unreal, then I see black

I open my eyes and through my crystal blue windows
Everything becoming clear
Memory's paintings all around
Reminiscing with my eyes

I close my eyes and search again
My mind knows there is more
beyond the ball of light 
I see fading

I open my eyes to the old and the new
I bring with me the manifested
The substance of my inner vision
Now for all to see

Reviews

[J.L Hunter]

This is a really great poem. I always tell people that the most important thing about writing is not the grammatical issues or even clarity of prose but the way the prose presents itself, as something that flow through the lines smoothly. You did this well. When i get to the computer ill give you a more in depth review of your other writing.

[Pete Langley]

This is your mind`s eye you`re using, Keely - often much more perceptive because the link to your thought process is that much closer and uncluttered by all the distractions your vision can give you. This piece is an inkling of what you can achieve - much more effective than some of your pieces where you tend to force the rhyme. P.

[kublakhan27]

I love the concept in this one...lots of great lines but the first one sets the table perfectly...I'd say this is one of your best :)

[Z. Shepherd]

People have the ability to use the backs of their eyelids as scries. If you see sparkles and waves of color after your eyes have adjusted to the dark, your third eye may be opening.

[Phoenix]

wow

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Excellent read and write.

[The 13th Eros]

There is a depth to each of; a universe alive within. So glad you are a poet who can confess that place so vividly.. powerfully... xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another excellent, flowing and descriptive piece Keely.

[Jack...]

To gaze upon another's visions is often delightful but at times it came be frightening as well. Very nice.

[AYVID N]

This poem conjured in me all sorts of visions, dark and light. True, we have to sometimes close our eyes to really see. You said it beautifully here!