Forget From Hate

Tugging at my memories

      scraping remnants from their walls

Tearing down what used to be

       stripping naked, bearing walls

Torturing my recollections

      haunting the vacant space within my chest

Slowly darkening the days

      turning them black, just as the rest

Feeding on what I once knew

      starving what I know now

Killing all that was

      erasing my mind somehow

Abandoned love

      breeds dark resent

It hides in shadows

      hunting memory hell bent

I don't want to forget you

       still slowly you fade

Absence makes fonder

      only hearts not hate made

Reviews

[Astro]

There are some really great lines in this one KJ, in this one in particular, I couldn't help but fumble a bit as I wanted to rewrite the line slightly. "Tearing down what used to be
stripping naked, bearing walls" I'm not sure, but I really wanted to change "bearing walls" to "baring all", it seemed to go with the 'naked' reference and it saved the line of a repetitive word to rhyme with. Good one.

[gombeggar]

nicely done...a good eraser poem indeed

[Mary Christabel George]

You portray pain really well.......

[Simon Welsh]

Hearts can be hate made. I like.

[Ency Bearis]

Great poem, well written.

[Rita L. Sev]

Absence makes fonder
only hearts not hate made...

This is a good line; I feel like it would make a great opening line to a follow-up piece.

[MoriartyMesa]

Now I aint an educated man like most of my learned reviewers here, (Google Professors imo) this came from a dark place in the heart and it aint like you can map it. I enjoyed this because it was honest.

[Sami Khalil]

"Abandoned love

breeds dark resent

It hides in shadows

hunting memory hell bent


I don't want to forget you

still slowly you fade

Absence makes fonder

only hearts not hate made"
A very nice write and the ending was magnificent...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I can feel the loud scream of your inner thought, life is a complex world to deal with and being alone after breaking up is the hard things to do.

But I am suggesting for spin up for this piece, some of the words are monotonous.

Great job!

[A. H. Pinley]

A nice piece!