Tsunami

I'm a sullen girl
   an angry sea at rest
Calm before the storm
   as the waves in me regress
Like a Tsunami
   I'm calm right before
Then a tidal wave of emotion
   crashes upon my shore
All out of strength
   I'm sinking more and more
Drowning in my troubles
   They're not puddles anymore

Reviews

[ANTO]

Instability in the area of emotions can have a devastating effect on relationships Keely Jane - one minute you feel you're this person then the next you are that person and those who know you might feel they are walking on eggshells too. A Tsunami was exactly the right way to describe this - learning to cope with such an affliction is a different story. Perhaps you could write about how you would advise someone (like me) how to deal with this problem? Keep writing KJ...
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[Eileenws]

I like how you weave your emotions into elements of nature. good job.

[The 13th Eros]

The wildness rages within, and what a strength it takes to let the storms surge without striking out at those we love. May you find a peace that can strip away the clouds from your soul.

[AYVID N]

An apt description of a tempestuous nature. But sometimes we do become the victims of our own deluges at our rough seas.

Very poignant and superbly said.

[quinfinn]

one thing about Keely Jane is that when she gets fired up over anything she can spit out some really good verse, like it is going out of style. your muse is working overtime, well done! i , too, have a write on here called "tsunami" but it is much different in both style and context.....you have done the word justice with this write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A nicely constructed piece Keely. Felt very angry and sad at the same time. Gosh you have been busy I see six of seven read requests from you lol!

[larryb]

Good stuff :)

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

A great example of how introspection in excess can lead to despair. This is teeming with pent-up emotion seeking a release. Is this how you intended it? Or is your figurative slip showing? Perhaps I delve too deep.

[Renée]

great visual of emotional turmoil

[kublakhan27]

Personification at its finest...definitely one of my favourites so far...well done :)

[Lover Of Words]

Awesome