Tsunami

I'm a sullen girl
   an angry sea at rest
Calm before the storm
   as the waves in me regress
Like a Tsunami
   I'm calm right before
Then a tidal wave of emotion
   crashes upon my shore
All out of strength
   I'm sinking more and more
Drowning in my troubles
   They're not puddles anymore

Reviews

[ANTO]

Instability in the area of emotions can have a devastating effect on relationships Keely Jane - one minute you feel you're this person then the next you are that person and those who know you might feel they are walking on eggshells too. A Tsunami was exactly the right way to describe this - learning to cope with such an affliction is a different story. Perhaps you could write about how you would advise someone (like me) how to deal with this problem? Keep writing KJ...
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[Perkele.7885]

=KeelyJane= I do not want to be the person that gets me mad either. I do not have an off switch! Either, I have to be subdued by a superior force or my supply of fuel or energy has to be cut off. Then I am ok again!
Get me angry, suffer the consequences! People that know me, know when enough is enough. And I know when it is time to leave strange or other company. You are a tsunami and I am a wild rhino.. Glad we know enough to keep each other calm.

[Astro]

This is great KJ, I like the metaphor a lot. The flow and emotional description is excellent. Paints a very believable picture of the sort of person who is normally so composed being rocked by emotion, like a tidal wave. Good job.

[Ency Bearis]

notable metaphor greatly written

[TL Boehm]

drowning in my troubles, they're not puddles anymore - awesome line. The whole poem is formidable.

[Baby Ricochet]

I like this one, Good poem

[gombeggar]

now this is very thoughtful and penetrating word-wise ...it says a lot in a little

[Frieda P]

I can relate, I hold it all in and let it build up, the really important stuff anyway, then it's kablooey!

[Mark]

calm or just damming it all up until it spills? I sense angst in this write.

[jinxxnij]

Ths one is so bad a*s! It really speaks to me.