Between A Rock And My Mind Space

I'm in between a rock and my mind space
I'm sinking as I swim.
Sadly, the repercussions of struggling within
I can't turn back.
I can only move side to side.
There's no moving forward, all bullshit aside.
Can't go on pretending.
Can't go on believing.
Doesn't do any good to give what in turn I'm not receiving.
All the reasons in the world
won't make reason enough
If I don't come to terms with when enough's enough.
Where is my line between
my glitter and my gold
When can I stop listening and finally see what I am told.
Between my rock and my mind space
Within the confines of my chest
Lies, barely breathing
The reason at best.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"I'm in between a rock and my mind space"
Easy to be undecided and be locked in. I like the flow of the thoughts and the strong ending. Nice combination of words made the poem a pleasure to read. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The last lines say it all really...the heart of the matter is the heart that matters.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

A portrait of dispare, well quilled. - like = (can't go on pretending and believing) Both desire validation instead of remuneration.

[Rob Santana]

This is a strong piece. I can relate 100%. Well done.

[The 13th Eros]

This cuts so deep into the world's pressures and the walls within your mind constricting you. How I long to see the sweet release for you from this blinding bondage of the soul.

[kublakhan27]

We are forever eluded by that golden reason that will set everything straight...I certainly feel like I'm forever living side to side...well said Keely :)

[The Rhino]

I am not going to pretend to be able to critique the technical aspects of poetry. I ain't a poet. What I can say is that every time I read one of your pieces I get a very visceral and solid feeling from them. They are not wishy washy and I like that.

[Jack...]

To be caught between then and now, eyes open but not seeing, very dificult to navigate. This was nice, thank you for sharing.

[Eileenws]

This is very profound. I like the long and short lines. They create a good flow. I was caught up with, Where is my line between my glitter and my gold and When can I stop listening and finally see what I am told. Question marks would have helped me. I like the title, between a rock and my mind space. Eileen

[KurKota]

Very poignant write. You use some very nice phrasing.... I particularly like your line.."when can I stop listening and finally see what I am told"... so often we hear what we want to hear..... and don't see what is the truth ! Brilliant way that you stated this. Very nice writing. I always find your writing to be worthy of the time to read.

[Frieda P]

Mind space is probably tougher than a hard place....I love to read you, you shoot straight from the hip. Well said, seems to be you're in that place with this one. Good luck with that, I still have cupcakes! ;-)