Life of Blah

I've got bubble gum thoughts and sneaker dreams 

A mouth full of thoughts running on high beams

Black and bruised windows, the fog infested kind

A penny for your thoughts, a dollar to change your mind

Discount all your beliefs, mark up the pleasures of the wrong

Put right into your pocket, the cost to tag along

Lint and silly string are treasures beyond gold

Nonsense and Blah make up the s**t we're told

If it's thought of and serves a purpose, convenience becomes the proof

Question the sanity of everything or the insane becomes the truth

Every one is infected so spread some sparkle with your germs 

Let your mind do your molding, live your life on your own mind's terms

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I am shocked that this does not have more reviews in proportion to the views...it's been scandalously overlooked I think...it's another great piece by you...you've given almost earth-shattering significance to idle things...the blahs you write about are anything but when paired with your poetry :)

[KeelyJane]

Thank you! That means a lot. I have my doubts sometimes about my writing so feedback like this definitely help. :0)

[kublakhan27]

You need not doubt yourself, your writing is just fine :)

[beautiful dreamer]

i love your rhyme keely! it seems that you rhyme in most of your poems and they are never confusing! thank you for that! i love a writer that can rhyme well! very good peice!

[The Nude Writer]

I really dig your style :) another fantastic poem :)

[David Scott]

Truth in this little rant...
"Question the sanity of everything ar the insane becomes the truth"
These are word to live by.

[rnuff]

loved your third and fourth lines, amazing.
Love the read as well

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think our thoughts get all fogged up because we listen to too many people...

we need to follow our own inclinations...

in the one line did you mean "Nonsense and Blah make up the s**t..."

"If it's thought of..."

"your own mind's terms"

just a couple touch ups...but this is wickedly good, and so different in phrasing..
not hashing over the same over-used lines...

really good stuff.

[emmajoy]

' .. Black and bruised windows, the fog infested kind ~ A penny for your thoughts, a dollar to change your mind ~ Discount all your beliefs, mark up the pleasures of the wrong ~ Put right into your pocket, the cost to tag along .. '

Life of Blah indeed, some very clear indications of your probable attitude and opinion. In the main your metre is great, goes a litte offtrack at the end but is a beckoning, illustrative piece of writing that i hope lots of people will read! Thanks lots, new friend.