When To Try

When To Try

A Poem by KeelyJane

Broken smiles

  on blank faces

Hollowed hearts

  now empty spaces

To some it's Karma

   to others it's fate

Heal with love

  those sick with hate

Open arms

    spread far and wide

Help the ones

    who've died inside

What once were dreams

    now pieces shattered

Such is life

    for the torn and tattered

When exhausted efforts

    are in need of rest

May determination

    be at its best

Its never too late

    to try again

Time is just

    a form of when

© 2013 KeelyJane


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

You could almost break this up into stanzas, I think it would make it more deliberate.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

time is just a form of when... incredible.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pick yourself up and march on. It's never too late to try again. Nice work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is meant to be read out loud. Nicely done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is one of your best. Bravo KJ.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice flowing poetry Keely with a message as usual and enough pathos to keep the reader's interest!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this one a lot Keely.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the flow, and the message, of this poem. You give a lot to think about; an inspiring piece. Good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good write of hope, empowerment and timing, I like this one a lot Keely.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is probably one of the best poems i have ever seen , describing the nuances of timing for those cherished moments in life. absolutely gorgeous.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

608 Views
11 Reviews
Rating
Added on February 19, 2013
Last Updated on February 19, 2013

Author

KeelyJane
KeelyJane

Albuquerque, NM



About
I'm just a girl with a lifetime of experiences. I've taken from those experiences what can be put into words and poetically put them together to share with all of you. These are my contributions. .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Dark Tides Dark Tides

A Poem by SyberRose