By Yourself Beautiful

Walking down a narrow road heading towards my home

I stopped to pick a flower from between the cobblestone

I wondered how it got there? Why was is all alone?

Standing tall and proud, far from where it should have grown

Independent by nature, a curious unknown

The beauty of the ability to be beautiful on your own

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[VennelaMargame]

You know, William Carlos Williams had a poem on a similar theme, it went something along the lines of "it's a strange courage / you give me, ancient star: / Shine alone in the sunrise / toward which you lend no part."

So it's rather a classic theme that you're tackling here, and it can work nicely. My advice here is to work on this a little bit and make it your own. I say this because the image of a flower growing out of stone as an image of solitary beauty and strength is rather cliche. It has appeared in writing many times before, and your poem would be all the more powerful if you were to tease it a little bit and work on making it your own.

The constant rhyme scheme, with the deep vowel and naso-labial consonant ending adds a certain calming, lulling sound to the poem. The rhythm is a little choppy, however. It's roughly iambic hexameter for the first three lines, and then it seems to become more erratic. I would say that it wouldn't hurt to rework the whole thing into a slightly smoother meter, to complement the smooth rhyme scheme.

So those are my thoughts and suggestions on this piece. Take them or leave them, of course, but I'll wish you all the best and happy writing!