Lost in Translation

I don't want to decipher metaphors 
 
or ponder analogies 
 
Due to over use of euphemism 
 
and false formalities 
 
I lose interest when delivery 
 
becomes borderline absurd 
 
When meaning drowns 
 
in pools of big words 
 
Without rhythm and flow 
 
Adjectives and verbs just combine 
 
Into a plethora of possibility 
 
not leaving one sure thing in mind 
 
I don't want to have to think about it 
 
or have to figure it out 
 
Conveying with simplicity 
 
to me, is what poetry is all about 
 
Complicated and confusing 
 
does not always mean profound 
 
Its in relation and understanding 
 
that the connection is found 
 
A point with no precision 
 
doesn't get through 
 
Words with reason and rhythm do 

Poetry and its delivery

A powerful communication

Unless its value

is lost in translation

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Poetry and its delivery

A powerful communication

Unless its value

is lost in translation

I do love a clear write as well, but every now and then I am up for a little mystery. Really, a place for both. But the real kicker is when a piece gets lost in interpretation. Oivey!!! Great write.

[ashesonfire]

I love this!! It's so true, you do not need big words to get your point across! A Lot of people just throw out bad words to look sophisticated, when it confused the reader. I know one of the main characters in my story wouldn't use big words, it's just not his style. So for me to try to "impress" my readers with big words would just lose the character in there.

The flow of your poem is very nice, and I always like the feeling and meaning in the poems of yours I have read.

[The Rhino]

Damn, you are good at this. I have read more poetry in the month that I have been on this site than my other 43 years and you just summed my perception of it thus far.
Thanks.

[VennelaMargame]

The music in this poem is quite nice. It's dry, but that obviously works in the context of the theme. The rhythm could be a little tighter towards the middle, though, perhaps. "I don't want to have to think about it" trips a little bit because of the sudden intrusion of a line of trochaic pentameter amid other shorter, more iambic lines.

I like the triplet "a point with no precision / doesn't get through / words with reason and rhythm do." It has a nice, firm sound to it, which helps drive it home.

Best wishes.

[AYVID N]

I agree Keely. I like your writing a lot. Its sharp, to the point and Succinct! It will be nice reading you and being your WC friend!

[Trigorin]

This is really quite nice, and you have a powerful message and delivery, but I would suggest perhaps thinking about breaking this up into stanzas, as it stands it seems a little long and uniform to me, but that's really just a presentation thing. Wonderful work on the actual piece.

[cooper]

cool end loved that..good voice n rythem . good job:}

[Frieda P]

Words can connect, confuse or take us to new heights. I myself like a metaphor if it makes me think, not if it comes from the planet Pluto. If it's from the heart, that's all I ask...to each his/her own. Move me, and I've enjoyed a part of you, you've done that here. Nice one Keely.

[A. H. Pinley]

Reason for fancy word usage in general conversation is a way of saying "I'm smarter than you". Keep the conversation simple and under control. Unforced in a natural state. Two people enjoying a friendly conversation. Nice writing Keely!

[Pete Langley]

A beautiful piece of contemporary poetry which could also be a textbook essay, Keely Jane! The thesis is build nicely with the use of alliteration and unforced rhyme which makes this a piece of art. Super. P.

[The 13th Eros]

You speak so deeply of the essence of words and emotion; of the verse and text that can bring light, or leave us lost in the shadows. Let words and meanings be stripped down to their bare presence... the beauty and truth and life that speaks clearly from one mind and heart to another. Yes.