I've Done It

I know about struggle and pain, the scars remain

from wantin' change, stayin' the same

passin' the blame, playin' the game

chasin' the fame, havin' no shame

I've done it.

I know about love and respect

I recollect hurt and neglect, cause and effect

not what you expect, coming correct

serve and protect, last I checked

I've done it.

I know about you and me, our destiny

what we could be, happy

alive and free, makin' memories

I've done it.

I know about this and that, when I look back

tit for tat,  all that crap

from where I'm at, it's in the past

I've done it.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

I'm left to wonder, Keely, if you're as jaded as you might seem(?), but in as much that you seem to resist responding to reviews, I'm guessing I'll have to be content to keep wonderin'. 😏
Wondering, too, if you read this or will ever know that I take time to read your splendid poetic offerings.

Just in case, I'll leave sayin' how very much I've enjoyed reading You! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Perkele.7885]

My oh my, indeed! I like this poem, you write good stuff. You always find a way to impress me. Keep it up, girl!

[Angi]

Oh, KJ! This has a snap and jive feel to it. This means to read aloud. So good, girl! Angi~

[TL Boehm]

Last I checked I've done it...its in the past, I've done it. Love this .

[Dana Alsamsam]

this almost flows like a rap! very cool form and repetition. only suggestion would be to clean up that third section as it doesn't flow as well as the rest in terms of the rhythm. great work though and way to conquer :)

[Simon Welsh]

Not a fan of rhyming but it's well executed here.

[Astro]

I love how you use those phrases so well, like in your other poem with the "cliche'd terms"(sorry can't recall the name) This one has a great hip hop/rap feel to it, that I think if you were to add a hook to the "I've done it" part you could have a hit on your hands. Aces baby, you win with this one.

[Mike Emil]

ARRGH!
I know all these things too
I sit on them
that's when the scotch comes out
and the ginger ale

[Mark]

I like the rhythm of this and how you break it up with the phrase 'I've done it.'

[Tarry Franck]

Nicely done - the flow of the poem is great too. Couldn't stop reading it even if I wanted to try. Keep up the good work.