TIme goes on without you

We are all slaves
to the hands of time,
you can't escape deaths cold grasp.
Live it up while you're young,
this time on earth won't last.
You sold your soul to make a deal,
you let your greed consume you.
There was no thought of consequence
or the people you may hurt.
You finally see the error
of your selfish ways,
you feel the cold breath
of death
itself
but realize it's too late.
The damage has been done,
and the dead are rolling in their graves
at the w***e you have become.

Author's Note

this is one of my first poems, give me an honest opinion on my work. please and thank you

Reviews

[watch_the_world]

I like this a lot actually good write xD I like it a lot I'm going to read some of your other works xD

[Disillusioned]

It's crisp, no unnecessary words. Your use of the language is effective. I like it.

[souldude]

This poem is amazing. The analogies in it are superb. I enjoyed reading it.