The Tree

The tree stood with all its splendour

In a place that shook with thunder

It was a witness to many happenings,

But none so glorious as this

For many days it watched over the pair

Whose hearts never succumbed to fear

Until that fateful day.

 

 

Years have passed; things have changed

The tree no longer stands with all its grandeur

It’s lush green leaves have withered away

And its trunk rots away with the mark

It was a mark of their love

Made on a midsummer night

When their fearless hearts refused to believe

That all this could ever end

 

A child’s voice rang out one day

“Why does that man sit there everyday?”

“Which man, son?”

“That old man under the tree”.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. You told a complete and interesting story in the poetry.
"A child’s voice rang out one day
“Why does that man sit there everyday?”
“Which man, son?”
“That old man under the tree”.
I like trees. Trees create life and purpose for many. Thank you for sharing for outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you for the review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[RNK]

Wow, that... Thats just amazing. Be proud.

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Wow, you've got talent miss. You words here are so powerful that they make one assuming he is at the scene of this event. Good job. .... Bona!

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you. I am glad the words were able to help you picturized.

[SariahM]

The tree stood with all its splendour

In a place that shook with thunder

It was a witness to many happenings,

But none so glorious as this

For many days it watched over the pair

Whose hearts never succumbed to fear

Until that fateful day... I love this bit. It keeps me in suspense, and that is how you can tell if someone is a good writer! Its in your blood. Keep up the great work!

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you so much for your kind and inspiring words

[SariahM]

:D> yur welcome!

[Dixie Slaughter]

Splendid! I think you did a very good job.

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank You :)

[Ashley Arita]

I really like the comparison with the tree and the man! It made a very prominent move, almost making you emotionally think about life and death. More similes and metaphors are always welcomed, but I feel it's very good.

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thanks Ashley

[rhymeaway]

I absolutely love the symbolism shown here!

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you.

[McBear]

Wow. Honestly, I really liked this ^^

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you :)

[annalysiar]

Beautifully done. Symbolic and honest. Very good work.

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you so much

[Owen Aldin]

So many things to enjoy about this one. I guess people will interpret things in different ways, but I like the first stanza in particular, it's very imaginative, like the tree shares and enjoys the moment.

For me, as it goes on, it highlights the despair that is felt over the loss of something significant, though it is hard to see physically on a person, so it is much clearer to observe the damage caused by the lost through the transference of this on to a tree.

Excellent writing!

[ExquisiteEyes]

Thank you so much for the review....I am glad you enjoyed reading it.