Yes Its Gone

Memories of Childhood

It's Gone , Yes it's Gone

It's gone , yes it's gone

The old days of joy

Grandparents to annoy

It's gone , yes it's gone

Making paper planes

And boats for rains

It's gone , yes it's gone

Playing with friends, in the park

Hide and seek till it was dark

It's gone , yes it's gone

Going to shops, buying new stuff

Rejoicing for days, as that was enough

It's gone , yes it's gone

Playing, fighting and singing with siblings

Laughing, crying, wrestling and tickling

It's gone , yes it's gone

getting hurt when playing and crying for long

Comforted by mother and her soothing song

It's gone , yes it's gone

Now I am left with only some money

Feeling alone in people's company

It's gone , yes it's gone

No one is listening and no one to talk

Empty roads and long sad walk

It's gone , yes it's gone

Surrounded by, the unknown fears

Overthinking, before shedding some tears

 It's gone , yes it's gone

Watching this life, passing by

Unaffected by the rains and sunny sky

It's gone , yes it's gone

Nights are restless, days are long

Losing control, it all seems wrong

It's gone , yes it's gone

All I want for today and tomorrow

Little joy of childhood from somewhere to borrow

Reviews

[Red Brick Keshner]

What we sometimes leave behind in exchange for financial security is what we were trying to earn more money for - the ones close to us and our relationships with them. We get so busy 'adulting' that a quest for a second childhood would surely follow. Thanks for sharing.

[lilfriend]

Thanks Frederick, life is too short and childhood is spent even before we actually realize how precious its memories will become in future.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I read this and could relate to a fair few things you touched on in childhood
Loved it 😊

[lilfriend]

Thanks a lot....so nice to know some of the things are relatable to you ...would love to get your feedbacks in future as well...😊😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Hi I re read this it came up again
Still love it 😍

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
First read of yours and I did enjoy it very much. As they say life is wasted on the youth... however, as we grow older we have memories and that is so wonderful. Hopefully we remember the good things and not too much of the bad...
I do not know if you want any true comments about your writing? If not then just ignore what I am about to write.
Some of your rhymes are great while others are not... for example long and wrong are great
tomorrow and borrow are great
but talk and walks doesn't work because of the s..
money and company sounds sort of the same but are not..another one is hours and fathers ...that does not work.
I say this because your poem is so good and could use a little adjusting..
BUT, as I say...ignore what I say if you feel your poem is correct..I am only trying to help.
Lisa, now in Spain

[lilfriend]

Hello Lisa,
First of all, thank you so much for reviewing and trying to point out some of the errors. As a non native English speaker...it gives me real happiness to know at least some parts of my poem are liked by people far away from me. After all we all have experienced joy and sorrow countlessly to find common grounds of emotions.
Every thing pointed out about the rhyming part is correct and hopefully I will improve upon them. As a rookie I know my technical limitations need a lot of work to do.
Hopefully you will continue to be a friend and guide.

[Lisasview]

Your response gave me goosebumps...I am so glad to know I helped even a little in your endeavour to write poems... Just double check what an actual rhyme word is...perhaps for example you can just add an s to talk and then that would work...and, park without the s will work.. You just need to find words that are true rhymes... believe me it does take some doing...
Lisa, now working on my new poem in Spain

[lilfriend]

Thanks Lisa....will make necessary changes in it....looking forward to explore some of your work

[Lisasview]

That would be great...
You might like Cry or Tender...or even Canvas of Dreams
Look forward to hearing what you think.
Lisa, evening now in Spain

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

All the wonderful moments of youth we took for granted as we lived them. You captured in this poignant heartfelt piece of nostalgia. This is a nice little gift of a poem to read and remind us how fleeting these precious moments in life truly are. Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

[lilfriend]

Thank you for sparing time for my poem, feels great to evoke some bitter sweet feelings of past and present in readers mind. I m grateful for the encouragement.