Raw

War is raw

In every sense

of the word

Virgin Metal

Elements mined and mixed

Cast for the sole intention

Of piercing another soul

Ripped from the Earth 

Only to return there

At 681 miles an hour

Shells discarded

In a deafening flash.

Their contents projected

In literal expressions of both

Fight and Flight 

Brass and Lead

Left countless dead

But beyond bullets, blood

Or whose soil it seeps into

Entire cultures undermined

Often eradicated

Absolutely intentionally

For private purposes

And pockets filled of

People you'll never know

For reasons they'll never tell you

Reviews

[Siren]

Death and I are on curious terms. You could almost say we have an affair of sorts. Nothing serious--just flirting every now and then. I really like this piece. It puts things into perspective. There are plenty of glasses to look through, when it comes to war and death. I think maybe if we saw it with our own eyes, we would understand it a little better. But, no one ever comes back to warn us, do they? Thank you, for this incredibly great write.

[Tricia O'Brien]

This is rad for sure. I dig your flow
Well done
Trish-

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Thank you Trish!

[minnie:)]

This poem pulled my attention in at the very first word, this is a really good poem :)

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Thanks Minnie, I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Leslie Philibert]

A very noble, thoughtful poem, that echoes my rejection of violence - fine job

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. War is raw and cold. Soldier kill without knowing why or who? I was a Soldier for 15 years. I met Soldiers from other countries. We were comrade in trade. The young pay for the sins and hate of their leaders. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Chidoriflower]

The imagery is shocking and pungent, and straight to the bone. The horrors of war can reach even to the most "honorable" seats in society, to accomplish political achievements, but destroying human life. It is scary knowing that people are murdered for reasons they don't know. Well written, sir.

[Baby Ricochet]

War is an addiction cause once it starts it's next to impossible to stop.

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Greed is the addiction, not war. War is just a means to the fix. Greed is an epidemic. Society is the addict.

[Baby Ricochet]

That's not what I meant. War is an adventure unlike anything you're ever going to experience in your civilian life. Once you're caught in the middle of it, it gets into you like nothing else can. Within a month home seems some weird distant memory and what's in front of you becomes the only reality that matters. Fire fights themselves are incredibly addicting. An adrenaline rush like none other. Sort of like a non stop car crash.

[Souladareatease]

Excellent write upon truths in horror, I cringe everyday at the atrocities of the world, mainly from the hand of my nation, keeps the head low such shames.
Excellent penned expressions!!!

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Thank you for the positive comments! I see these things every day and it breaks my heart. I know writing poems won't change the world, but I hope it will help other to.

[quinfinn]

you are a very gifted writer and i am glad we met on the radio broadcast the other night. this is a great venue for you to expand on your writing ...welcome and thank you for being here! awesome poetry abounds in your repertoire, expand and enjoy!

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Quin, thank you for this review and for the introduction to this site. The reception I got here is very encouraging!

[quinfinn]

time to make more friends and expand your horizons...from what i have seen, people already like you....welcome home, ubuntu !!!

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Thank you! I hope to get some friend requests. Lots of reviews but no one has sent one yet. Funny how all the attention was on only two of my poems too.. I look forward to hearing feedback about the rest and writing more

[quinfinn]

send out some requests of your own...and those were the two poems of yours i highlighted for reading....aha! if you want to send out read requests you must make some friends. i did so on your behalf to introduce you to some of my friends, they are great people and awesome writers....have fun!

[quinfinn]

request some friendships.....they won't bite....

[Jessica Gillitzer]

wow, this is very deep. it is written really well and pulls me trough it very easily. you use very interesting expressions and wording in this. War funny enough in more way then one as you point out is an endless subject and act. Very nice write and read.
< 3 Jessie

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

I am glad you liked it! Thanks for the feedback.

[Jessica Gillitzer]

=o)

[Rita L. Sev]

This piece is a perfect description of that hell on earth. For such a mystery as war, the deeper mystery is why they continue. Amazing write.

[Derek ubuntu Dunham]

Thank you for the feedback! Why war continues is no mystery, but it is shrouded in deception and misinformation. The people need to rise against once again and remind our government who they are working for..