#1 Walking To Work

Terry and Kerry are moaned at by Sheridon whilst going to work, then Sheridon gets moaned at. It's just dialogue.

Family members, Sheridon, the oldest and tallest, the twin girls Terry and Kerry, and Stefan were walking to Debra's workplace. It was quite sunny, too sunny a day for hassle and stress.
 
“It isn't any nice when you said Michelle was on the phone”, said Sheridon trying to patronise Stefan for being insensitive, which made him look silly for trying to teach a person who couldn't even tie his laces how he was insensitive he was in the first place.
“Why isn't it?” argued Stefan reminiscing at how funny it was to trick him into thinking that his ex-girlfriend was on the phone.
“How do I put this " Because my girlf " You stupid bas-”, Sheridon explained with tense and rigid body language, as he wanted Stefan out of his sight.

 

Swiftly moving on, I think it's time for some background information about the characters. Sheridon is Michelle's ex-boyfriend. And he was a lousy one. He was a guy who girls adore, and want to be with. But also one who disappoints all girls, except Tracy once they get to know him, as he's not boyfriend material. He just keeps slipping up. One day, he left the city for two weeks and only told his girl once he had moved.
 
Another time, they spent the night at her place while her parents were gone. The next day, he
told his mates that he had sex with her, describing the action in detail. That she invited
him upstairs, and then some, after a cup of tea. Michelle was furious when the word got passed
round to her, a month later. He was lying.
 
“I'm sorry Sheridon”, Stefan apologised, not meaning it but saying it out of obligation.
The mood seemed to cool down very slowly from here on.
“Did you see what Stefan did one day?” asked Terry changing the subject, “He gave his
teacher a black eye”. Nobody replied. Kerry didn't because she didn't like her identical twin to
give attention to a six year old, she longed for herself and Terry to spend time together.
“I need a girlfriend man”, moaned Sheridon.
“Well you could have --”, said Terry only to be interrupted, to prove how dumb her suggestion was.
“No anything but that. I need a proper one. I wish I had someone who could be my girlfriend. She was the one who...”. Sheridon continued talking but no one was listening. The twins thought he needed to get a grip. Everyone wondered whether Sheridon was a burden to have as a boyfriend. They recalled the silly stuff he did in their minds, and had words for him. But nobody dared to say those words. Just agree with Sheridon.
“But as long as you believe that, it'll always be true,” lied Kerry. Kerry then turned her head around for a second.
“True dat, true dat, but dat Ryan person is with Michelle now. I can't be like him”, Sheridon whined.
“I say you beat him up”, Stefan added, only to be ignored.
“I say you date his younger sister”, said Terry thinking mischievously.
Michelle found it hard to hold a relationship with someone who kept failing and making the wrong choices. When she met Ryan, She decided to leave Sheridon for him for someone else. So that's when he smashed Ryan's car as he stole her and in an affair that she started.

“That won't work, you should date Michelle's younger sister, Eliza. You never know, Michelle might get jealous,” Kerry said outdoing Terry's suggestion. Terry was furious.
“That's a better idea. She left me for Ryan. So why can't I date Eliza and get her to dump her current boyfriend? That'll prove how worthy I am as a boyfriend.”, Sheridon said happily.
“But it's risky business pretending to like someone. Taking three people on the pull”, Kerry warned hiding the fact that Eliza may reject Sheridon.
“Which third person”, Sheridon asked, like this third person didn't exist.
“You're about to find out...”, teased Kerry.

She was the girl who Michelle told yesterday to go see Sheridon today to make him happy. Her name was Tracy. was Tracy. Sheridon's wish ironically came true presence with Sheridon is a reign of sadness. She was wearing a sky blue T-Shirt with a white bear sat upon a cloud, and above that was a rainbow with 5 colours. This person approached Sheridon from behind.
“Sherry”, Tracy called out happily thinking that if she used a nice nickname, it would make
her seem like a sweet girl.
“I don't know no-one called Sherry”, said Sheridon looking around.
Stefan started chanting repetitively “Dorkyshades " Dorkyshades " Dorkydorkydorkyshades!
“You taught him that! Oh I never knew you were so rebellious”, smiled Tracy grabbing
Sheridon's arms to find some muscles.
“You don't know the half of it”, Tracy muttered referring to how last week he smashed Ryan's car in a jealous rage over Michelle.
 
“I don't know who you think you are dorkyshades”, Sheridon said wobbling Tracy's dorky and
nerdy glasses, “but we're going to Debra's workplace, and you're not invited.”
“But sunglasses make me look cool " and they add a G to my name. Tracy G Lake”, Tracy replied.

Tracy was responding to pressure from the outside world, telling her to be cooler. “Nobody says coool any more. They say sick. Tracy Lake. You're not even supposed to be here. Family members only.

“Well Debra says that I should see you more often. She gave me your new mobile number”,
“Well we weren't even going out, I only dumped you when I found my inbox filled with 44 texts from you. Sexual harassment, innit?” That happened before Sheridon dated Michelle.
Tracy had loved Sheridon for a long time and was never going to give up her losing battle. Sheridon had broken Tracy's heart again. She was fighting a losing battle to win Sheridon over and make him her boyfriend. Tracy started crying, and she hugged both Terry and Kerry.
“I told you she was a dorkyshades”, gloated Stefan insensitively.
 
Tracy took her sunglasses off then tried to be hugged by Sheridon. But Sheridon didn't want to
give Tracy the wrong message. That would make her even more upset later on.
“I think you two are suited together”, Kerry commented.
“You have a lot of pent up anger and need someone who cares about you and Tracy needs someone who can support her” added Terry.
“That is preposterous! We're totally bi-polar, opposites. She's too --”, Sheridon was outraged!
“That's amazing! It's so true!” agreed Tracy. But Sheridon had no time to argue, Tracy was now with him and there was nothing he could do about it. And if he did, the word he would be using after ''She's too'', would surely hurt Tracy's feelings.
She was now crying, because she loved Sheridon more than anything, even before he used to date Michelle. She had faced rejection from him so many times before. And that one was the worst so far, as it told her what made him dump her in the first place. To think that, she could still be with him now if she wasn't too clingy, was too much.
“You may be tagging with us, but you ain't got Debra's handbag, so you be best off with my sisters”, teased Sheridon. Tracy was about to pick up Stefan to talk to him, but Sheridon was far too
important, she continued.
“Well Debra sez if you tag with my crew, she'll make you not grounded.”
“The word's roll with my crew, not tag, forget what Debra says, your crew ain't even tight, forget our friendship.” (what are they talking about??? Just confusing)

“And besides, you're not even trusted to be in charge of Debra's workplace. I know you like me
anyway,” Tracy responded.
“Of course I'm trusted. Here, look at this”, said Sheridon looking through the Hotel Handbook. “Debbie Danks, locked out of hotel room 69, has misplaced her keys. Records show that they've been placed in your office by Tom, but he's not here to show her where your keys are. Debbie only needs to collect her belongings and then leave the hotel altogether. So you give her another key for her hotel room. What have you done wrong?”
“Simple, phone Tom to confirm they've been placed in your office. Debbie's lying to get a spare set of hotel keys. She could sell them online”, Tracy assumed.
“Wrong!” shouted Sheridon, “Debbie's real room is 96, she's twisted the numbers round to get a second room”. The twins found Tracy's reaction to the question absolutely hilarious.
“Okay! Give me another one!” snapped Tracy.
“In the hotel corridor, you hear a really loud disturbing sound coming from the hotel bedroom. There's a lot of movement and laughing and the bed is creaking back and forth.”
“Eeew! Spare us the details!” squealed Kerry.
“Don't be a frickin' chicken you scaredycats. You enter the room, and are surprised to find an obnoxious boy bouncing on the mattress laughing and swinging on the top beams of the bed.
How do you get him to stop? He refuses to stop.”

“Give him some sweets,  cakes, whatever”, said Terry hopefully.
“Wrong Again!” shouted Sheridon again. “You find some stuck up people, or some people who haven't got a hotel room yet and bring them into the room. The child will stop as he'll feel embarrassed to be caught by some people who're renting the hotel room.”
“Are you serious? Let me see that!” Tracy snatched the handbook. After three seconds of glancing at the pages, each question seemed as preposterous and ridiculous as the one before it. It was too much info for her brain to process so she immediately dropped the handbook on the floor without realising it. She picked it up and popped it in her handbag.
“Gimmie dat handbag”, Sheridon spoke nicely.
“Let me roll wiv ya an den I will”, she replied “I know you like me Sheridon....
 
Everyone went silent.
“No, really, trying to resist me Sheridon, we're gonna have to get along some time.”

“Name me one time”, insisted Sheridon.

“It was snowin real bad, the bus broke down so we walked to your place for an hour anna half and you said it was fifteen minutes.”
“That doesn't count. We live near each other.”
“It was April Fools, and we placed chocolate inside the toilet and ice cream vomit on the carpet and Debra had to clean it all.”
“You're right then.”
“We're nearly there”, shouted Stefan pointing.
Tracy started adding up that when she asked Sheridon yesterday, where he would be today, that he refused to tell her.
Sheridon saw Tracy walking off because she felt like she wasn't wanted. Something had to be done.
“No, it's not like that. I don't want you to go. It was because Debra's not at work today, so she could lose her job if we don't fill in for her. Debra said more people would make things more complicated. But I would be happy if you came”, Sheridon lied, he didn't want to cause any more distress to Tracy.
 
Sheridon held Tracy's hand out of being obligated to do so, and then they were there. The ClexaCubicle. A magnificent building, worthy of hotel excellence. They were finally there. Tracy found hope that today, Sheridon would leave today with a smile on his face.

Author's Note

I wrote this short story for my English GCSE when I was 15 years old in Year 10.
What did you think of the chapter and Sheridon?
Don't hold back. If you disliked it or thought it was crap, please say.

Reviews

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

this was good in some cases, not so good in others. you did a good job of developing the characters and setting up the storyline and plot. however i found the structure a bit harder to read, why does it staart a new line in the middle of ssentences for some of them? and some of the way the dialogue is set up also made this piece difficult to read. so keep up the good work (detail, imagery) and maybe try fixing the structure. it would make this piece easier to reaed in my opinion.

[Melissa Theresa]

I really like the character build ups. By the end of this chapter you know a lot about Sheridon, and a good amount about Terry too. By the end of the chapter the reader kind of writes him off as a stereotype of a guy who kind of uses girls and is selfish. But then he turns around and lies so he wont hurt Terry's feelings and etc. It surprises the reader and makes him a more dynamic character.

[tynamite]

Terry? Don't you mean Tracy? It's Tracy who is Sheridon's ex, not Terry.

[tynamite]

All the characters in the book are dynamic characters, not shallow characters.

[deeps]

Wow! I like this such amazing imagery and detail in this.
This is a very well written write.

[tynamite]

imagery lol