One-Sided Relationship

 You snake your way in

Expecting warmth and shelter

When you're comfortable you shed your skin

Now you've over stayed your visit

 

Your a pest now

Continuously finding your way back in

You drain my wallet trying to be rid of you

I have no choice but to move

 

Evolved into a cloud

Ruining my life

Depressing me and shadowing my life

You have brought ice to my heart and veins

 

Metamorphosed into  cancerous flesh

Now instead of mt wallet, you drain me of life; happiness

You've diseased me, quarantined me from existance

Will you still haunt me when i die?

 

Author's Note

this is my second poem, please tell me what you think

Reviews

[King Fisher]

You use so many difficult words, but your grammar is still terrible. I don't even know what "now instead of mt wallet" means.
And, it's not "your a pest" but "you're" (contraction of "you are").

But I really love the imagery of "the cloud hanging over you." It's good writing, but some parts are confusing and it stops the flow. Also, make sure you avoid double spaces and change of letter size. It makes the poem easier to read.

[Sami Khalil]

Nice imagery. Good writing...:)....................