The Night Hunter

The Night Hunter

 

down from

the ceiling

 

it will

come nightly,

 

and through

the dark

 

shall it

now crawl...

 

biting at

the ankles

 

of anything

unknowingly,

 

and then

again climbing

 

up these

unlit walls

 

9-20-08

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

very cool imagery in this piece ... love the creepy feel you displayed and the short powerful lines... nice job on this one..

[J.Black]

Excellent work buddy!
I really felt this, it gave me goosebumps.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I think you need to change this from future tense to pesent tense to kick it. i. e. " down from the ceiling it comes nightly; through the dark it crawls" I think that is scarier...just my thoughts.

[Fire&Ice]

I got chills, just by imagining this scene. I like how you do not specify what the thing is, and how you use realistic, concrete things to tell your poem. My favorite thing in this poem is the last line, "up these / unlit walls".