Who Died?

Who Died?

 

this thought,

comes creeping, into

 

my squiggly mind...

 

are you, really dead to me,

or are my eyes, now,

covered in dirt

 

8-7-08

Reviews

[xlynne]

i liked this poem but the only thing was that i thought the word squiggly in my squiggly mind sounds wrong, i think you should replace that word with some word that means disbelief. although that is just my opionion. everything else is perfect about this poem.

[Drifting Blue]

This was interesting. I was reminded of my hard of hearing Granny who when she couldn't hear what was said would often say, "who died?" I'm sure that wasn't your intention, it was just my association. The poem itself is also interesting, simple yet with punch.