Reaching Up

Reaching Up

 

add water,

 

and watch

me slowly grow...

 

I'll reach up

toward the heavens,

 

and all because

someone fed, my soul

 

6-3-08

Reviews

[Angel Bird]

Happy the one who found someone to whom he/she is worth enough searching and finding the soul within, caressing it, soothing it, and reinvigorating it. Isn't that the biggest part to well-being? ... The body isn't the only one who needs food and drink - the soul is also if not even more so a very hungry and thirsty essence, but not every being gets the right nourishment...

An amazing and inspiring write! I very much enjoyed it! Thanks...

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very inspiring write with very cleverly chosen imagery. Great job, my friend.

[.mate.feed.kill.repeat.]

This is such a lighthearted and inspiring piece. =] Its simple little rhythm was quite catchy and your lines flowed together magnificently.

One suggestion I'd make is in the last line, delete the comma. I think the comma makes the rhythm awkward. Also, the line doesn't seem to read right with the comma there.

But this is truly a lovely, heart-lifting little treasure. Beautiful work, I love it.

[Pj]

Yay! This is pure awesomeness!
I particularly enjoyed how at first I thought it was going to be about love and the imagery of a flower...but then in one line you changed the whole meaning! It shocked me and I think it was genius!

[Barry S. Maltese]

Nice annalogy. We grow as writers when we grow as humans. When someone touches our lives, hearts, and souls . . . we become better humans, and better writers. You have undoubtedly become a better writer. Your talent grows as if it were a flower touched by springtime

Good work, my friend

[Adela Muresan]

Uhhh� touching.

I adore the way you expressed how love ,,lifts us up,,.

A.M.

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Aww=) How dear and sweet=) Such hope=) Very inspirational and "up"lifting=) I love it! Beautiful write=)

[Pall and Mall]

I absolutely adore the use of commas in this poem. You have such a knack for breaking up lines to create an unsurpassed flow and rhythm of words. Ahh! Brilliant.

-Mall

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really great and brilliant usage of words!
Very well written

[justjenn_2u]

A complex message penned in such an understandable selection of words.

I felt a positive vibe while reading this piece and I can tell your soul is growing, from your words.

Awesome job!

[Vanessa_Page]

The simplicity is gorgeous...