Splitting Monkey Ache

Splitting Monkey Ache

 

 

a monkey

  with

 

a migraine

 

was a

bit

 

on the

tipsy.

 

after his

battle

 

with the

bottle

 

had come

to end

 

he was

heard

 

to say

never again

 

will I

down

 

vodka nor

gin

 

in such

a drunken

way

 

but at

least

 

I was

able

 

to out

drink my

 

dragon friend

 

under the

table.

 

7-16-07

Reviews

[Carole]

Okay, now this is a cute write. Catchy title, for sure. Had me curious so I just had to see what it was all about??! I love how you stretched it out and made it long with only a few words on each line. Been there, done that...both vodka and slow gin in the day, plus a few other non-pleasantries that left me reeling with a headache and the bed spins one too many nights of the life. I will have to say, I don't miss those days. Thought it was fun back in the day, and it sure as heck numbed my pain. I'm lucky it didn't do me in. :-) Somebody was watching out for me. ***Wink-wink!

[Jessica J]

I LOVE THIS!!! Not very often do you find writing like this and I think it is absolutely genius. I wish I had something constructive to say, but I don't!

[Brett Campaigne]

the structure serves to create a playfully suspenseful flow, in which you combine punchline with metaphor to great effect.

"I'd rather have this bottle in front of me, than a frontal lobotomy"
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