No Tomorrow, No Today

Written for the "Less is More" contest.

No Tomoorow, No Today

 

sadly, you're

forever gone,

 

as bitterly,

I'm forced to stay...

 

5-15-08

 

 

Reviews

[mick weller]

`Tomoorow` - sorry, it's that beedy eye...
In such a short piece the title can say so much...
surely such a timeless state brought about through a sad loss...
...the bitter sting?
I feel a sense of selfishness in this too - reminds me how selfish we all become to losing someone...
as though we see a part of ourselves lost too...
once again thoughts are provoked!

[MrJodie]

The only thing that isn't perfect about this poem is the formatting. However, I blame that on the website, which I almost never do. This would be absolute perfection if it was the only thing on a blank sheet of paper or, even better, the only words on a white wall as an art installation.

It's fantastic!

Less is more... this one's definitely more. Great work!

[Imperfection]

Simple and straight.
So short yet expressing such a lot.

The title is just appropriate.
I like it.
Thanks for entering it into my contest.

[Matthew J]

If less is truly more, this poem says it all.

[neanie]

you do the less is more genre extremely well; great writing.

[Lucky Me]

woah. I want to know more for sure, but then again its enough for what it is. I enjoyed your bitterness much more than your angst in this. That is what I found intriguing. You're bitterness towards this change and why it is you won't accept it. Interesting.