Rhythm of Life

Rhythm of Life

 

spinning tight

within time,

 

and moving

    to

this rhythm,

 

chasing those

vivid dreams...

 

it's sometimes

tougher than

 

it seems, and

 

twirling towards

the darkness,

 

only offers

more sadness

 

5-8-08

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

I'm a fan of your stlye, the swiftness of it, but also, I imagine these words read aloud slowly. It offers a nice contradiction. You make great use of line breaks, it adds an extra bit of ambiguity that makes the mind work a little bit more. I also like how you crammed an epiphany within such a small space. Keep up the good work.

[robin]

This flows from high to low. It flows toward yet away. The first line is a great opener. I still think on what is tight spinning...heh heh heh great!

[Norma J. Jessee]

It seems the rhythm of life we have now is more like a disco than a waltz, and me being an 80 year old right in the middle of it. That's exactly how I feel. Too fast, too much to do and too little time to do it in.

This is great James Keep them coming.