Ugly Punch

Ugly Punch

 

hazing from the sunrise,

 

for its eyeing me, and

unfriendly doing so...

 

why, did I take that much;

 

knowing today would surely

offer only more ugly punch

 

5-2-08

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

I love the beautiful succinct punch - no pun intended - of this poem. The writing gives a sense of what that punch is like. The quickness of how fast a punch happens. If you had made this a longer poem it wouldn't have had that same jarring effect. I also love the line, "hazing from the sunrise." That's just gorgeous.

[Pj]

This sounds like a hangover...am I mistaken? Oh well it was really good...short but strong!

[mick weller]

for its eyeing me, and

unfriendly doing so...

hmm is that it is eyeing me
or deliberately
its `eyeing me` as in state or condition
- another hot day - more sunburn? I don't know...
great to be left what? and why?
always a pleasure
cheers

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Because reality is atough pill to swallow.

[vanishing]

Ugly punch-james
this poem is pure metaphorical insight
Sounds just a hangover
in the emotional sense,
Pure Poetry by design
A pleasure to read!