Beyond The Grey
A Poem by
James K. Blaylock
Beyond The Grey
ripping the black
from shadowing our eyes,
and removing the foul
flavor of sour words;
from these mouths
now rightfully gaining our feet,
to walk beyond the stale grey...
for we do not deserve
any soulless existence
3-24-08
© 2008 James K. Blaylock
Featured Review
Short and sweet. I like how your diction contradicts your intentions. You counter all of it, but with double negatives. This is clever stuff...
"ripping the black
from shadowing our eyes,"
-- I see light
"and removing the foul
flavor of sour words;"
-- making them sweet, or neutral perhaps
"to walk beyond the stale grey..."
-- into color
"for we do not deserve
any soulless existence"
-- into a soulful existence
You use darkness to contradict darkness, I love it.
Posted 16 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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James..powerful
the entire imagery is painted black
the concept is delving-dark
and speaks insight
is in experience in foreboding
You are a Top Notch poet
Posted 16 Years Ago
James..powerful
the entire imagery is painted black
the concept is delving-dark
and speaks insight
is in experience in foreboding
You are a Top Notch poet
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Very dark and dramatic piece with a strong message. Some things we can't control but how we react is what we can control. Congrats on your place in the contest :)
Posted 16 Years Ago
Very dark and dramatic piece with a strong message. Some things we can't control but how we react is what we can control. Congrats on your place in the contest :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
thank you, and good poem as well. isn't he great with the critiques?? (below) haha
Posted 16 Years Ago
thank you, and good poem as well. isn't he great with the critiques?? (below) haha
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Short and sweet. I like how your diction contradicts your intentions. You counter all of it, but with double negatives. This is clever stuff...
"ripping the black
from shadowing our eyes,"
-- I see light
"and removing the foul
flavor of sour words;"
-- making them sweet, or neutral perhaps
"to walk beyond the stale grey..."
-- into color
"for we do not deserve
any soulless existence"
-- into a soulful existence
You use darkness to contradict darkness, I love it.
Posted 16 Years Ago
Short and sweet. I like how your diction contradicts your intentions. You counter all of it, but with double negatives. This is clever stuff...
"ripping the black
from shadowing our eyes,"
-- I see light
"and removing the foul
flavor of sour words;"
-- making them sweet, or neutral perhaps
"to walk beyond the stale grey..."
-- into color
"for we do not deserve
any soulless existence"
-- into a soulful existence
You use darkness to contradict darkness, I love it.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Make your mind up time here...
from shadowing - this sounds passive, working 'shadows' in would be stronger?
hmm, shadowing from doesn't work either?
maybe 'that shadows...
I don't know, I'm stumped, but I like the message
but I read: any soulless existence as - an existence without soul(?)
(... see why I don't do poetry?) is it 'cos I'm fighting it?
Posted 16 Years Ago
Make your mind up time here...
from shadowing - this sounds passive, working 'shadows' in would be stronger?
hmm, shadowing from doesn't work either?
maybe 'that shadows...
I don't know, I'm stumped, but I like the message
but I read: any soulless existence as - an existence without soul(?)
(... see why I don't do poetry?) is it 'cos I'm fighting it?
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Yes, rise above it. If we don't want to share in what life throws at us, we can always add a little sugar and water and make lemonade from that lemon.
Very deep and powerful James
Keep them coming my friend.
Posted 16 Years Ago
Yes, rise above it. If we don't want to share in what life throws at us, we can always add a little sugar and water and make lemonade from that lemon.
Very deep and powerful James
Keep them coming my friend.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
that is short but really deep,they should keep there mouth shutt if all they can do is speak bad thing's and yes you can walk away from the darkness that life can bring.good job
Posted 16 Years Ago
that is short but really deep,they should keep there mouth shutt if all they can do is speak bad thing's and yes you can walk away from the darkness that life can bring.good job
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This is a work to meditate on. There is much meaning to this poem that falls between the words. It is really well done. Cheers.
Posted 16 Years Ago
This is a work to meditate on. There is much meaning to this poem that falls between the words. It is really well done. Cheers.
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James K. Blaylock Tyler, TX
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Hi, I'm James K. Blaylock and I'm a poet/writer. I'm 39, and I live in Texas. I was born and raised here. I have been writing now for 13 years and I've been blessed to be published a number of times. ..
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