Your Crying Song

Your Crying Song

 

taking your disease,

 

and suffering longly

with this sad pain...

 

who knew you

were handing out freely,

 

those aches of shame;

 

your crying song

 

3-13-08

Reviews

[Carrie Montgomery]

I can't believe how strong this is because it is so simple and short. Very powerful. It reminded me of family members of mine who are alcoholics and "cry" about it ruining them and promising to quit and then they continue on with what they say they hate. Maybe it is just the mood i'm in (Easter with some alkies- yay:( )
that made me interpret this way...I will read again when in a different mood and see if it affects me differently. Written well.

[Michael X]

indeed james, this poem captures poetic essence in full spectrum, regarding the accentuation of
the voice of heart, "your crying song" that is certain original, yet absolutely relatable,
the relinquishing of turmoil in a way of searching for empathy, i think everyone has a crying song
of some degree, to want to feel pitied when the moment's down. capturing contemplations!

[Norma J. Jessee]

This can be understood as pertaining to so many things.
There are some who are so bitter and feel they have been dealt the wrong hand so they decide they should hand out some of their pain to others, and they do in so many ways.

Exceellant observation, and an excellant write.

[None]

People take out their pain in many ways. Your poem is reflective of hurt, pain, shame and so much more!! Your title and final line are superb! An excellent, excellent poem!

[THE BLACK SEAL]

good work my friend

[mick weller]

I'll have what you're having!

minor point here:
those aches of shame;

again i see a colon here? ie: what follows...

whoa - you've got a voice!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Well written, expressing pain and suffering, in simple words that shares the hurt.

[Fran Marie]

A sad and heartfelt piece wonderfully expressed in few words~WeLL DonE!!~Fran

[Mike L. Smyth]

this reminds me of a lonely person, sitting on a park bench on a rainy day, with no one there for comfort...very sad, but good.

[Shelly Wiseberg]

sad, heartfelt and deep it pulls at the heart strings, aches of shame good line, Shelly