Everytime I Cry

Everytime I Cry

A Poem by twixbubbles
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Everytime I cry

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 Every step I take is, a step towards you,

A step towards the cemetery A step towards your cold ,pale body.

Everytime I close my eyes I see you,

holding me tight with your fingers intertwined with mine.

I tell you to never let me go,

But,

one day you let go

You let go of your family

You let go of me

You let go of your life.

Everytime I cry

It's over you

it's about how I should have done better

I could've saved you.

Everytime I hear your name

I walk away 

Because everytime I talk about you

I want to die with you.

Everytime I see your face

I look away

Only wishing that it was reality 

Everytime I think about you

I get Angry

Thinking Why'd You leave me? 

Everytime I see your tombstone,

I Cry

© 2013 twixbubbles


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It's terrible when someone close to you passes. This is very emotional. I think it could be re-worked a little bit but it's beautiful. great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

twixbubbles

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the feedback
There is palpable, heart wrenching pain in this writing. In line two I inserted entombed instead of pale. Just a thought. You rock, girl!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

twixbubbles

11 Years Ago

Thank you, also my vocabulary isn't wide enough i'm going to need to work on that,
Sharon L.H. Kelly

11 Years Ago

You are doing just fine!
Very Emotional I love it:)


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

twixbubbles

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)

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Added on July 21, 2013
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twixbubbles

Calgary, Alberta, Canada



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