Tall Dark Walls

Breaking down the walls you build to protect yourself

 Through the thick looming night

     under the cover of darkness

I was being buried alive

     trapped under this coffin of skin.

 

Every step was a step in blindness

     because you crowded my vision

Yet every breath counted more time

     that I was without you.

 

I lived behind these tall dark walls

     keeping others out

but what I didn't realize is that

     someone cared enough to tear them down.

 

Then you came along

     and the darkness began to fade

and I was alive

     for the first time in my life.

 

You are the current within me

     that gives me life.

You are the hope

     that gives my life meaning.

And you are the light

     that guides my every step.

 

Now the darkness is gone

and I have broken out from the walls

     that I hid behind for so long.

 

Through the bright sunny day

     the coffin disappears

Leaving me vulnerable

     yet protected forever by you.

Author's Note

Something I came up with recently after seeing the words 'coffin of skin'- my mind instantly coming up with the first stanza, and the rest followed.

Reviews

[Krazy On The Outside]

I likr this piece a lot!
An amzing job! =)

[Jenn Wathen]

wow thats ... wow im amazed its really thought out i really like it

[Vesa Lee]

..........
Now the darkness is gone
and I have broken out from the walls
that I hid behind for so long.
.........
A wonderfully crafted piece.
You've expressed these feelings (feelings I am no stranger to) incredibly well.
You show us sorrow but leave us smiling, assured that there is hope.
Lovely, lovely.
Well done.

[[.Marissa.]]

Very good

[Brandon Lee Burton]

Every step was a step in blindness

because you crowded my vision

Yet every breath counted more time

that I was without you.
------- my fav part, very well written and keep the attention very well too ^^

[Laoidhigh Uilleag]

I havent read your other recent poems but they have come along nicely.

This is such a perfect piece, amazing, glorious, any positive adjetive!

[Daniel]

This was really well written!
It sounded so... amazing. :)

I love the descriptions.

Great job!

[Kyari Hasutto]

I love this piece! It sounds like something I would write. As far as content wise. ^^

I'm amazed...This is absolutely fantastic...I'm almost speechless...

I didn't see anything that directly needed to be changed, but I'm not that good of an editor, so there could be something that needs to be fixed.