I Died in My Dream

a dream

In My Dream

 

In my dream, I lay lifeless and still

a corpse embalmed, six feet’ neath the hill

legs tied, body wrapped like mummies sway

my mouth silenced, unable to cry out or pray

 

I was lowered descending in the dark haze

But I saw your eyes flashing in amazing grace

Tears well up, filling every shaded eyes with drops

But yours stay still, in constant rhythm sighs

 

Each last words, from love ones pleasures my heart

Like chills of frost in autumns mist

Your last word, a doubled edge piercing dart

Penetrating deeply above my wrist

 

Your tears not yours, but a hollow mask

Faint, unreal, tearing life apart

Your tears now covered by a slow hidden smirk

The veil lifted, I could see my blind eyes

 

The pain I felt was beyond every hell made

Its venom unknown, beyond all darkened shade

Just because my heart diverted once

You unleashed the darken burning torrents to haunt

 

But I woke, you were there by my side

Darkness fades, and the light resides

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[Jerry Ables]

This piece is written and expressed very well, Tumi. There is a lot of intensity here. Richest blessings to you and yours! :)

[A.H.]

That's a terrible nightmare. Just reading it made me miserable, can't imagine going through this terrible dream. I like the way it has been written. The whole feel to the poem from start to end is disjoint, distort, hazy and some chills. So well done. Thanks for sharing, tumi!

[LVW]

I love how the poem has a distorted feel to it almost like your trying to remember something that keeps slipping away

[Betty Hermelee]

I can identify with bad dreams; i have them every once in a while, and you awake shocked and stunned at what just transpired...happily for you all the cheating and dark emotions in that dream were over once you awoke and your love was beside you...." your grudge was that I cheated once ago"...sometimes we think of of heavy emotional notions when we dream...very powerful write; thank you for sharing!
Warmly, B

[Soren]

I feel the power in this piece that dives under the surface and deep into the depths of another world. Dark and dreamy it leaves feelings of insecurity and unease. Well done

[Arundass TP]

Terrible nightmare. I can't even think. Good poem

[Tumi]

thanks for the kind review
it means a lot

[Marie]

Wow! What a nightmare that dream was, dear tumi... So traumatic, I only realised I was holding my breath when I reached the last two words! A gripping write which drew me in and did not set me free until I had finished reading the poem! Well expressed, depiction is superb and this plain text is so very much easier to read, thank you for reverting back to it. GREAT write which in spite of the horror I felt, I enjoyed reading. Thank you for sharing, tumi...

[Tumi]

thanks for the kind review
I'm happy you enjoyed reading
it means a lot

[Marie]

Most welcome always, tumi...

[Neville]

Dont think I would be able to sleep again for a month at least .. I think love can do that to ya .. nice one tumi .. or should that be ..

[Tumi]

thanks for your kind review
it means alot

[Beren]

And you broke the pillars of my heart
With your last words
You shook the host of hell
With such words
In Your tongues were stings
That never lived
in my heart such bitterness
I have never felt

ARE YOU KIDDING ME???

[Tumi]

Lol
how was those lines
good or bad

[Beren]

I'm glad it was just a dream and you woke up and gave us your wonderful poem.
The way you presented the words definitely opened new paths in my mind.
Everybody should see this but I'm jealous that I'm not the only one reading this, but we'll still make your voices heard :)

[Tumi]

thanks for the kind review
i' m happy you enjoyed reading