I Died in My Dream

a dream

In My Dream

 

In my dream, I lay lifeless and still

a corpse embalmed, six feet’ neath the hill

legs tied, body wrapped like mummies sway

my mouth silenced, unable to cry out or pray

 

I was lowered descending in the dark haze

But I saw your eyes flashing in amazing grace

Tears well up, filling every shaded eyes with drops

But yours stay still, in constant rhythm sighs

 

Each last words, from love ones pleasures my heart

Like chills of frost in autumns mist

Your last word, a doubled edge piercing dart

Penetrating deeply above my wrist

 

Your tears not yours, but a hollow mask

Faint, unreal, tearing life apart

Your tears now covered by a slow hidden smirk

The veil lifted, I could see my blind eyes

 

The pain I felt was beyond every hell made

Its venom unknown, beyond all darkened shade

Just because my heart diverted once

You unleashed the darken burning torrents to haunt

 

But I woke, you were there by my side

Darkness fades, and the light resides

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Interesting, relatable and eloquent.

[Thomas W Case]

Wow. Powerful work. Scary.

[Thad]

Very relatable I've
had similar dreams,
a thought provoking
poem! 🤔
Eloquently penned
my friend!
Best regards Thad

[Tumi]

Thanks for the kind review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes dreams are so real, even when we wake...
This one brings me to thinking about what people will actually say and feel when we pass...will their words and thoughts be kind? Or will they feel cold and uncaring?
Maybe our spirit will stick around long enough to find out.
j.

[Tumi]

Thanks for the kind review

[AYVID N]

You took me to some very relatable, dark places, the likes of which haunt me often. Thank God it was just a nightmare! Amazingly narrated, dear Tumi!

[Tumi]

Thanks so much for the kind review
Glad you are back

[Jerry Ables]

This piece is written and expressed very well, Tumi. There is a lot of intensity here. Richest blessings to you and yours! :)

[Abhilash Hegde]

That's a terrible nightmare. Just reading it made me miserable, can't imagine going through this terrible dream. I like the way it has been written. The whole feel to the poem from start to end is disjoint, distort, hazy and some chills. So well done. Thanks for sharing, tumi!

[LVW]

I love how the poem has a distorted feel to it almost like your trying to remember something that keeps slipping away

[Betty Hermelee]

I can identify with bad dreams; i have them every once in a while, and you awake shocked and stunned at what just transpired...happily for you all the cheating and dark emotions in that dream were over once you awoke and your love was beside you...." your grudge was that I cheated once ago"...sometimes we think of of heavy emotional notions when we dream...very powerful write; thank you for sharing!
Warmly, B