I Died in My Dream

a dream

I Died in My Dream

 

In my dream

I was there

Lying as a corpse

Placed few feet in the soil

My legs were tied

My body wrapped like a mummy

My mouth was still

I would have cried

Like a kid

 

I was lowered in darkness

But I saw you in amazement

You were there

But my soul could be far

I heard every last cry

From my mother

Your mother

My brothers

They were together

In their words

Were like relieve

It cooled my minds, when they repeat

But I saw your eyes

All the same

I felt your cries

Weren’t yours

You looked and smiled

Stealthily, a large frown

My mind was wide

The heat that followed

Was beyond hell

The pain I felt

I could not tell

The pain beyond

Was from my broken heart

The love I nursed

Was what cut us apart

Your mind was far

Beyond the love you hold

Your grudge was that

I cheated once ago

My pleas of then

Were like air

That passes through the nose

And you broke the pillars of my heart

With your last words

You shook the host of hell

With such words

In Your tongues were stings

That never lived

in my heart such bitterness

I have never felt

 

But I woke,

 you were there, by my side

it was all a bad dream

a night mare

a wrong realm

of darkness

a misplaced night

A bitter sight

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

just a dream
feel free

Reviews

[MrBlack202]

Nice poem, and relatable to many of us.

[red93]

Nice idea, but really needs more work and could be shorter.

[Ken Simm.]

Interesting, relatable and eloquent.

[Thomas W Case]

Wow. Powerful work. Scary.

[Thad]

Very relatable I've
had similar dreams,
a thought provoking
poem! 🤔
Eloquently penned
my friend!
Best regards Thad

[tumi]

Thanks for the kind review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes dreams are so real, even when we wake...
This one brings me to thinking about what people will actually say and feel when we pass...will their words and thoughts be kind? Or will they feel cold and uncaring?
Maybe our spirit will stick around long enough to find out.
j.

[tumi]

Thanks for the kind review

[Ayvid N]

You took me to some very relatable, dark places, the likes of which haunt me often. Thank God it was just a nightmare! Amazingly narrated, dear Tumi!

[tumi]

Thanks so much for the kind review
Glad you are back

[Jerry Ables]

This piece is written and expressed very well, Tumi. There is a lot of intensity here. Richest blessings to you and yours! :)

[Abhilash Hegde]

That's a terrible nightmare. Just reading it made me miserable, can't imagine going through this terrible dream. I like the way it has been written. The whole feel to the poem from start to end is disjoint, distort, hazy and some chills. So well done. Thanks for sharing, tumi!