REDEMPTION

Love,lies,hopes & dreams

Coldness runs in my body, it burns inside…I’m numb

Black and blue, wounded, lost in my maze

Reaching, searching but always a dead end

Lookin for a glimpse of light in this fuzzy chilly trail

 

Tears were shed, blood was spilled

So overwhelmed with nothingness inside

Broken, bleeding, lost and barely breathing

So much pain, so many things, too much to think;

 

Sinking, deep into loathing animosity

Heart is filled with emptiness…couldn’t care less

There’s nothing left, only blank spaces to fill

Save me, ease the pain or end it instead

 

Been pushed, and drowned into tears;

Tried to breath, in an overwhelming notion

Embrace life & kiss the singh, all at the same time

A beautiful saga between victory and defeat

Horizon’ covered with speck of darken blaze

A whimsical play of colors, mists, & blinding shi*s

 

Just see me don’t close your eyes, it’s me

Just hear me, don’t turn your back now, please stay

Don’t think, I’m beyond comprehension as they say

Speak your words dear, it might just heal me

 

Been in my darkest nest,

Never meant to belong, never meant to be loved

A package of uncertain complexities

Carved with vengeance, forged by steel,

Always wandering, looking for haven, safe refuge

But constantly lost, stuck in this lonely conundrum

 

See me don’t close your eyes now, it’s me

Hear me; don’t turn your back, just stay;

Don’t think, please don’t hesitate, feel my sincerity 

Speak, your words dear, save me from my own enemy;

Author's Note

to everyone:
hope you like this,
i wrote this poem when i was looking for life's answers
through this poem, glad i found it
through this poem, i was able to feel & see life
reflection of life i need not to lead

im a newbie in writing, but pls dont be linient
really looking forward for a good critique
that would help me improve my writing skills

fr. a humble poet, love & peace tenkyu ;)

Reviews

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
I really liked this poem. I had no understanding of your chosen word “Singh”. After I looked this words definition up it made the poem much deeper. And I rarely run into the word “conundrum”, a very well placed word that added a wonderful flavor to this stew of words.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

Singh |si ng |
noun
a title or surname adopted by certain warrior castes of northern India, esp. by male members of the Sikh Khalsa.
ORIGIN from Punjabi siṅgh ‘lion,’ from Sanskrit siṃha ‘lion.’

conundrum |kəˈnəndrəm|
noun ( pl. -drums )
a confusing and difficult problem or question : one of the most difficult conundrums for the experts.
• a question asked for amusement, typically one with a pun in its answer; a riddle.
See note at riddle .
ORIGIN late 16th cent.: of unknown origin, but first recorded in a work by Thomas Nashe, as a term of abuse for a crank or pedant, later coming to denote a whim or fancy, also a pun. Current senses date from the late 17th

[Xia Murphy]

Whoa, this is intensly awesome! I wish I could write poems like this, I really think you did a good job on it. Congratulations!

[SilentVerses]

A rhythm runs through the darkness as it transforms into an understanding, self-awareness blooms through the knowledge of emptiness. Falling to rock bottom, to then soar with wings to the peak of acknowledgment. Instead of turning away from self; become self and embrace the despondency of isolation, a hurt that is born from misunderstandings from the eyes that don't want to see. Beautifully haunting and honest speaking through simple language of hurt. Like it.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Lovely writing. Packed with emotions> well penned!

[Stormy Weather]

This is beautiful. I love it!! Great job :) (and I like what you said in the author's note).

[Decaf]

intersting piece of work

[Raven Starhawk]

Coldness turns a heart into ice. This poem was so wonderfully penned that I am stunned and have to sit in silence while my brain tries to work again. You have done well.

[Xx_Belle_Emo_xX]

i liked this (: