When You Killed Yourself

Your Earthly luggage shackling  

We are snared in sadness here

With bed linens tucked and draperies draped 

I have rubbernecked in waiting through the window

Wandering evermore for that hint of you

Till nonentity surmount to entity

There is nothing to conjure 

I need your love in the mess

Desperate since sixth-sensing that

Sniffing your cologne I’d swear you’re here

I have made it up from nothing

Lately I believe it, too

But reminiscence is not real; a picture in my head

That reminiscence might just do

Until I come be nothing with you

It serves to be your spirit, too

Routine confiding with an emptied room

Opened my mouth but said nothing new

Talking to inanimates since you’ve been gone

I both let go and stay held on

Once the Sun has risen now, I plan to see to that

Down three sets of stairs, to the yard I’ll go

It’s all I have to remember you

This stone will have to do

Reviews

[GarithRoland132]

This, is utterly beautiful and I will have to say that this is one of the best most powerful poems I have ever read and thank you for sharing the feeling

[T.S. Claus]

This is an incredible compliment. I am blown away, thank you so much it means the world to me!

[Jesse Booker]

Damn! This is excellent! Definitely one of the most readable and intense poems I've ever read. Great job.

[T.S. Claus]

Thank you for saying so! It means so much to me. Thank you for taking the time to read and review!

[Sindu]

Blown away by this. A emotive and intense write. Other than the tone of underlying sadness, there is that yearning, a place between reality and that lost. I love your tone, words and everything about this.

[sereenaoutloud]

This is sad but so beautifully written. You can feel the pain and loss woven throughout your words!!
Great write :)

[Avinash]

There is an eerie feeling to this ballad of missing someone closest to your heart. The memories hurting and disturbing you but you can not complain only can write about them.

[Rana]

I love the words you've used to write this moving poem. Beautifully narrates a poignant tale in fabulous style. Very different. The 4th and 5th paragraphs would be my favorite. You're quite a good poet, Tyler.

[Zahra]

Wandering evermore for that hint of you
Till nonentity surmount to entity
There is nothing to conjure
I need your love in the mess

Very nice, well penned.

[Reeg]

I Like it!! :D Analogy doctor over here ^~^

[allformsofgod]

At the risk of being repetitive, all I have to say is beautiful. And quite memorizing.
It's hard to make me feel emotions, but this accomplished the impossible.

Thank you for the poem.

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Really touching. The analogies are my favorite part, beautiful.