Worthwhile :)

You know my bedrooms such a mss.

I can barely see the floor,

and theres road signs on the walls-

splattered paint all on the door.

 

And in my life theres ruckus.

My hearts a little torn,

my friends can be a let-down-

problems solved and then reborn.

 

Well hey, my smile's crooked too.

And I never wash my hands.

Hell, Ive seen some nasty porn

and Ive heard some s****y bands.

 

Somedays I wake up tired.

And I waddle out of bed,

thinking "f**k today will suck"

I guess Im poisoning my head.

 

I drink almost every weekend

I swear at my mom most days.

I go through a different crush a week

they all become just a phase.

 

In this mess I speak of.

I manage to stop and smile,

and take a pen for poetry-

write down all my things worthwhile.

 

Reviews

[Destiny]

This had an honest, carefree, 'this is who I am.Deal with it' feel. A very enjoyable read.
Thanx for writing
♥Destiny♥

[CircleFace]

While this poem isn't really something that reflects me, I do know a lot of people that can relate to it XD I like the flow and pace of the poem. It seems a bit angry in parts, but not in a bad way, like this poem has something to prove. Does that make sense? I waffle... Anyway, the point is, I like this poem very much. It definately captures the teenagers of our generation.

Just a few things though, at the start you missed out the 'e' in mess. And there are some words that are missing an little ' just before the 's'. Like 'hearts' should be 'heart's'. Just little things, but they don't really take much away from the enjoyment.

Keep writing, I hope to read more.

[Nicole Archer]

Wow, I loved this. It reminds me of myself!
well done. well done.