Twisted Contortions

Scavengers of innocence sing in unison to incantations of ruptured, coarse harmonies

Half eaten flesh of tainted hands offer tares of deluded fear

Choking the presense of happiness and forgivness

Multiplying my rage within a circus of twisted clowns

Holding shards of deathly glass plunging into my broken heart

Releasing the shear pain of my hated existence

Thick delicious blood poures out engulfing my tragic visions

Only to drift off onto a new plain of heightened reality

Labotomising the feelings of a prisoner that predicts her own fate

Burying the wishes and dreams of an over rated life and last breath

Author's Note

Please excuse my grammer errors.

Reviews

[Jane Doe Smith Rogers]

I feel great pain here that remains unresolved.

[Patrick Paul]

I really liked this poem alot, actually i wanted more. the first two lines defintely hooks the reader and the twisted clowns and the glass in the heart gave it a strong middle section. To be honest thought the last line wasnt as strong at the rest of the poem. I didnt have as much discription and i didnt feel the pain as much in the end. I think you have something really special here. Actually i am kind of jealous i wish i could put that kind of detail in my poems. Amazing job and you could always change the ending but if not was still superb.
Patrick

[Legacy]

Hello Trinityluv122,

Hmm~
I am at a loss for words on this piece. This is beautiful in a heartfelt sort-of-way.

Very nice choice of words � they are indeed filled with the emotions they deserve.

I hope light, for this individual, is starting to shine through this dark travesty.

A more in-depth closing would be helpful - Or is your intention to leave the audience lingering?

Wonderful write�

Legacy

[Edmond Dantes]

killer. good writing here--friend, you know i like this type of writing--the pain and the anger! let it out---breath, keep writing, email me what inspired you here.

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

Nice visuals. It was very abstract...to me anyway. Dark like a nightmare, yet not exactly scary. Like the Twilight Zone.