The Black Shack

The little black shack

Sitting in the cornfield

Among the barrenness on the side of the road

Hides itself from the world

But is visible to me

it sits there in the light

In broad, open daylight

As black as the midnight sky

The purpose of this shack is unclear

For nothing sits inside of it

For it's just an empty shack

Or an eyesore on the side of the road

It's quite odd as to why someone would build it there

On the side of the road

Within the confines of a cornfield

And not store a thing inside of it

It's just like problems in our life

Taking up space in the side of our mind

Hiding from the rest of the world

And appearing as an eyesore to us

So do as you may with your "black shack"

Take whatever steps are needed

For mine is no longer a black shack

But now a pile of black ashes

Scattered around, and out of my mind.

Reviews

[Daisy]

wonderful description and great job writing this..... it's wonderful

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

From your first write, to this new poem I see tremendous transition and growth. I am in admiration and so proud of you. I cannot wait to see how you will grow further as a person and in your writing. I thought this was very thought-provoking and profound.

[Emily]

Like wording!
Well done!!

[Emily]

Interesting take on our darker parts, Ricky!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very well done Ricky, like the imagery and the metaphor use. :) Rudi

[RiverRei]

I love fire so I loved this. Thank you for posting new things for me to read. I always love your writing. This is a huge difference from what you used to post, but I like it more :) I wanna burn my little black shack now :P Catch title, too :D

[nazia]

the message, the vocabulary, the theme, the expression, the execution every thing is simply brilliant Ricky.
Great job :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like the message within this poem, sometimes our minds focus on unnecessary things which can create an "eyesore" feeling, like you explained in the poem. I especially like how you ended the poem, it challenges readers to do the same, to no longer keep the "black shack" cluttering our minds, but to take action and get rid of it.

Good Job

[Ana B.]

Great imaginary and originality. Love this one :)

[Madhu]

This is a beautiful write. I liked the title, well done! :)